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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
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you are skilled with the written word a true wordsmith you are better than shakespeare and Jane Austen combined i loved the way you formatted
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I like this. I rather see this happen in the movie than Christine ripping his mask off. Update soon!
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
An intriguing start but it is very hard to read with no paragraphs. Your descriptions are good but perhaps you might consider finding a beta reader to proof read for grammer and such. I did like it though.
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Always edit your story before you post it!!! Try using a spell checker and try using paragraphs! Each paragraph should be 3-5 sentences long and be spaced so as not to give the reader a massive headache. Most readers won't bother reading it if it does no
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I like your story so far. please update soon.
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I like your story so far. please update soon.
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Wow... this is hot so far... but please don't make the rest of the story one big paragraph.... you can easily get lost and put the dialogue (talking) in quotes... update soon!
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
... Are you planning on continuing this, or are you just going to leave us there? Leaving us there is redefining cruelty, I hope you know!
Hoping to see a second chapter!
Skimbleshanks
Hoping to see a second chapter!
Skimbleshanks
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
ok, yea, so i'm glad that so far you all like. that makes my writing esteem go up. *sigh* i hate using quotes, so instead i'll just move each speaking thingy to a new line, ok? and paragraphs will appear some how through my use of seperate lines. kk? al
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Just ignore RAOULSTHONG... he's a noob and he's being sarcastic.
A BETA is someone who will go over your story before you post it and correct technical and grammatical errors in it. Basically it's being an editor. Sometimes they will fix it or just
A BETA is someone who will go over your story before you post it and correct technical and grammatical errors in it. Basically it's being an editor. Sometimes they will fix it or just