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Great story so far... Can't wait to see what happens next!!! What a shame Elizabeth was left behind (MUHAHAHA *don't like Elizabeth) Well she'll just have to marry that stuffy Norrington. Allowing Will and Jack to enjoy each other. Update soon please!!!

Aw...good chapter. I hope Will realizes soon that the Pearl is where he should be ;)

I love it! Remarkable start... The Will charaizatization is absolutely stunning--makes me want to cuddle 'im right up!
*cuddles*
Moi

Once more, very good, your grammar and spelling like we said last time is very good, though you made one mistake I noticed:

"Jack, I have to get back to her! I can just leave her!" I think you mean can't.

But besides that, everything in that respect is perfect. Though there is something starting to bother me, and easily explainable if you look at it the way I think your writing it, but I would like to hear your specific explanation, if you don't mind, lol.

You have William out of character in this, he wouldn't sit down and cry, at least not somewhere he could be fo but but as I had said earlier, this might be because he's so confused, seeing as he's been a little off kilter from the start of your story. Maybe he'll even out to normal soon.
-Edward Unwhai Silverfang

Ah, but if the story is well written, one doesn't notice that it's 'slow'. PWP is fine, but the build-up, the explanation, is lovely too. I like your characterization of Jack. It still amuses me that Will can't swim, and can't get away to carry out his threat of leaving Jack. Poor Will. He's just so much fun to abuse.

Ah, but if the story is well written, one doesn't notice that it's 'slow'. PWP is fine, but the build-up, the explanation, is lovely too. I like your characterization of Jack. It still amuses me that Will can't swim, and can't get away to carry out his threat of leaving Jack. Poor Will. He's just so much fun to abuse.

WUHUU!!!
That was great!!!
SEQUEL, SEQUEL!!!!
yeah...

I'm feeling cromagnon today...

I likes it..... I yao yaoi! The whole getting grabbed around the waist part in the first chapter was vury well written. Gme ame a little twinge in my stomach. XD

I love it. It is a wonderful story so far. Uber cute, yes, but if the next chapter doesn't come out soon, I shall impale your royal authoressness upon my beloved Sporkof Doom. lol. May you never be lacking in pixie-stix, and have a Depplicious day!

lol. This is going to be great! please write more soon! Will Jack give Will swimming leasons?