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for Leave Me Lying Here

by lostmarbles

person Eci_Frog
schedule February 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You`re crazy! Ending the capther there! I can `t wait to find out what happend to jack and will. Did Jack get hurt? Please don`t say it`s so...
Another great chapther as always!
You must never stop writting.
person Kelsey
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Jeez Jack says precious a lot. He's starting to sound like Gollum. Muahaha! LoL Update as soon as possible! *huggles*
Love, Kelsey
person Leigh
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
First of all, this is a great story. You have sucked me into a human au when I told myself that would never happen.

Unfortunately the footnotes keep throwing me off. Instead of using brand names, just make up a place. Or just assume the audience knows what you're talking about. Good writing(1) doesn't need footnotes, and footnotes mess up the flow of the story.





(1)You do have good writing. That's not sarcasm.
person latinereget86
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
No you didn't just leave it right there, for all we know Jack and Will are going to die in the tornado. (j/k) Anyway I wanted to tell you that I just love this story, and that I hope you update really soon cause I want to know if Jack and Will live.
person Morelwen
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love you! This story is the best! More slash more sex!ehehehehehehehehe I'm cruel, and demanding
person Demeter
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
heh... I <3 the way Jack calls Will "precious" and who the freak is Kurt Cobain???? lovely story... I <3 hot topic!
person Eci_Frog
schedule February 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon! I just love this story and can`t wait to find out what happens next. And Jack in leather! Hmmmmmmmm.
person Jessi
schedule February 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awww, I love this Will so much. *squooshes him* Most of the times I want to shower him with little paper hearts, and then there are those times when I just want to strangle him for being stupid. But that's ok, I don't think I'd fair much better in that type of situation. Blast. Karma. o.< pain. Karma from wanting to strangle your will, it was. *rubs side* I hates the random karma cramps. grumbling loudly I am.

Anyhoos, wrie more of this soon please, before I feel the need to threaten you with large dead fish in another review and suffer more random karma cramps. I live only several hours away from the ocean, I could do it! I could! Beware! Er, if I could ever find my way there. *stares at map all disgruntled like*

Lurv,
Jessi
person Eci_Frog
schedule February 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Love it. Love it. Love it. Love it. Don`t you ever stop writing.
person Julie-Rae / Yakkorat
schedule February 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I just have to say really quickly that I had a dear friend for a very long time, y yoy young man who worked in a fudge shop. He used say he was the luckiester ier in the world. After all, how many gay men could say they really were fudge packers? It was a huge joke. God, I miss him. Just thought I'd share.
Love,
Julie-Rae