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for Pretty green eyes

by Natasha

person harpling
schedule February 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i like it, i really like it. please continue!
person Katie M. Holmes
schedule February 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Um good begianing can't wait for more
person TaraRose
schedule January 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This has a good opening and I like the premise....
person EssenceOfEvil_13
schedule January 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story! You have to update soon. Pretty please with sugar on top?!?!?!?! (puppy dog eyes)
person MelanthaNocturne
schedule January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey wait! Why doesn't she say his name if she likes his gifts and him? And why does she like him? Because, despite Jareth's SEXINESS, she didn't like him in the movie, though according to most of my friends, and me, there was SUPREME evidence that he liked her. Maybe in later chapters you should explain her reluctance to call for him. Perhaps she has forgotten? Perhaps she's still as stubbourn as ever and won't admit deafeat (which may solicit a midnight visit/dream)? Or maybe there's something more sinister at work...the manager....or even Dawn keeping her from the Labyrinth? Please enlighten me!

Regards,
~Melantha
person Talene
schedule January 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Loving the movie and Jareth as I do....I am very interested in seeing where you are going with this. *smile* Poor Jareth.....Pleade do continue to write. I'll check back tomorrow.
person CeltGdds
schedule January 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey your story is really interesting, i realize you're just starting but I would love to read more, I never would of thought of making Sarah a stripper (she is a stripper right?) anyway its good and needs to be continued until well the end happens.
person SP777
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Intersting. Life isn't going the way Sarah ped, ed, of course I never pictured her going that route...but this is fiction.
SO what happens now?