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Very interesting storyline with just enough hints to keep everyone guessing and just enough information to keep the reader from getting bored of guessing. Well written and (appearantly ) well thought out. Only request would be a a few more physical discriptions of settings and such. I can't wait to see where you take this.
Whitewitchdark

Wow... just wow. At first I was quite hesitant to read a fic that involved Will's death, but then I got pulled in. Your words flow so elegantly, the plots molds itself with them. The dialogue gives off its own emotion and not many people are capable of that. You acheived it well. The plot is original, and I like that. Originality is the key in the writing business and I'm very intriguied with where you are planning on going with this fic.

Thanks for sharing! Can't wait to for more!

Cheers!

You know, it's so nice to find some decent, *intelligent* Jack/Will slash. Hey, I'm all for the pointless smut - who isn't, really? - but it's very rare to encounter a fanfic that actually manages to think things through a little bit.

The way it started off, for example, was very, very cool. It set the dark tone for this, which has been steadily carried throughout the story thus far; just like Jack himself, while there's a bit of playfulness to be had, underneath is a very depressing, very real current of something very...ominous, shall we say. I like your descriptions quite a bit, and I do believe that you have Jack down pat, which is a very hard feat, considering his character. Takes some talent to do that.

The only possible complaint I could have is the "wordiness" of it thus far. While I totally respect intelligence and all, I just think (and I can't believe I'm saying this) that you're using...well, too many big words. XD It actually makes the narrative a bit choppier than it ought to. I'd suggest picking and choosing the lesser-known words that you'd like to use, so as not to interrupt the flow of the story as much. But hey, that's just me.

So! Keep this up, I'll definitely be looking forward to updates.

~Chibikat

PS: ...poor, poor Will. That's all I have to say.

Oh boy, oh boy, more!!!! It's extremely well written, and I'm really glad to see Will alive (Well sort of) but dude, what happened to him to make him so tainted?!!! Keep writing please!!! Don't stop now!

I love your story! Update SOON!! You write very well, and I admire that! Keep writing :-D!!!

*does another dance* Woo! I'm liking this story more and more and more and more *takes a breath and calms herself*
Fantastic, simply fantastic, and I can't wait to hear more *waves her 'Jack/Will forever' flag*
I should point out that I would leave a more coherent review if I weren't full of cherry and/or vanilla coke and 'Hyper-Toffee' That's really what they're called.

Wow, what a wonderful story. I can't wait to see read more as soon as you have it posted. Continue, continue.

Wow, I am most intrigued as to what is going to happen next. Please use your new green pen to write more and hurry up and transcribe it for us to read! :-D

this is great. Will's been raped hasnt he? and hes spirtits gone into hiding. More damn you.

very original and interesting...the psychology draws me in. not sure where this could possibly be going, but it's a great (sad) beginning. keep it up! post more soon!!!!