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Can'it tit to see what you do with this

OMG - that was soooo hot..Wow treamreams I had last night of the twins was simply amazing...*grins* Please you must update and soon! you did an amazing job for your first adult fic!

I'm actually quite pleased with how this story is turning out and you're a very skilled author. I thought when I first saw the summary for this story it'd be PWP, porn without plot. But I like how you've actually given a conflict to this story. I also was pleased with how Naomi wasn't the blond ditz I thought she'd be. She's a smart young woman and very crafty. I enjoy how you've seperated Twin One and Twin Two's personalities by things they prefer to do. One enjoys giving beatings, Two enjoys sitting and watching.

One things I'm hoping for, being the pervert I am, is that One and Two will catch Naomi and hopefully tease her. I can't wait to find out what's going to happen next and I've been keeping my eye on this story for maybe a week or two, and only now have registered with Adultfanfiction.net to review this. You're an intelligent writer and definetely have a talent.

~Elexies

YOU UPDATED!

*runs around in happy circles*

....I almost feel sorry for Amber now... but at least Kina ina gets some twin love.

Twin smut! Twin smut! Your going great please don't stop now. When you put up the next chapter let me know I would love to read it. Please finish!!!

This is really hot and all, but I wanna hear more about Naomi! Schwa!

just a note, it takes a LOT of force with a riding crop to cut the flesh. un you you're not using it right... acrosr abr abdomen... Amber probably wouldn't be able to breathe very well for quite a while. They're really not meant to be used on people, and REALLY not to cut through skin!

But still. hot hot hot. want more more more. pleasy?

I don't usually review, but I just had to for this one. This story has the perfect blend of sex, action, and mystery. The heroine is more than she seems, and the portrayal of the twins is amazing. Please, keep writing, and quickly, I think I'm becoming addicted to this story. Have I mentioned I appreciate the presence of a plot? Write, please!!!

Not bad at all. In fact, very good. If you are actually worried about plot with this, the only thing I have to say is that the two wowen just happenio beo be out of money and prepared to fuck wealthy businessmen for the dough is a huge conincidence and a little unlikely. But I'm really enjoying this. Write more.

ok here's somthing to feed your ego...ok, as i said before i love the story line and i'm glad your adding somithing new because it was getting a little boring. What you could do is show a whole different side to the twins that you haven't shown before (hint go darker). I like your writing style becuse its not confusing and you don't jump around over much. Please keep writing, i'm really into this story and i want to know what happens next!

Sigh................I am force to admit. THIS IS AWESOME!.......Eh hem. Now se dse do continue. I am getting such a kick out of your version of the twins. Your work is spectacular, and, like the twins, I amoughoughly enjoying this hunt. I is rare that authors can come up with intriguing characters like Naomi. Please continue. Your work is greatly appreciated.