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December 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!!! I LOVE YOUR STORY!!! This has to be one of the best Johnny Depp stories, well one of the best period. You must continue!! I thouroughly enjoyed every bit of it. Your portrayal of the characters was brilliant, and the descriptions were wonderful. The sex was ..... ahhhhh, so good. Please contine as soo n as possible!!! ~alina
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November 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I fell in love with this ages ago and I can't believe I never reviewed it! * smacks herself * bad llama bad llama! I'm not really a llama * winks * Anyhow....I think you may have read Jack Loves Black at one time, that was mine but I took it off. As I did with most of my stuff. That is all irrelevant because this is about ~your~ story and how much I love it and the fact that I'll come running after you with a rapier ( not like I'd be able to wield it ) and force you to write more. I could never kill you, that would defeat the whole purpose of forcing you to write. Enough with my ramblings...
you must continue!
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you must continue!
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October 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You should totally continue.
It was amazing, well planned, nearly flawless in spelling and grammar and totally original.
I adore how you've writen Jack, and Will, and even Johnny although I rarely like RPS. This is just wonderful and although you sometimes let things go for a while or place in a little too much sex it is brill.
Maybe tone down a little on the torment you're putting poor Johnny though. He'll be locked up for good if you kep this up!
For the next one, maybe you should have it a little later on though...as in this one it seemed as if you meant that if Johnny was still in Jack and Will's time any more he'd be stuck there.
Plus, I like the long ones, when Johnny goes to Jack...rather than Jack going to Johnny. It makes it more interesting to see what they could get up to.
Keep it all up, cause this is truely wonderful work.
Kayez
It was amazing, well planned, nearly flawless in spelling and grammar and totally original.
I adore how you've writen Jack, and Will, and even Johnny although I rarely like RPS. This is just wonderful and although you sometimes let things go for a while or place in a little too much sex it is brill.
Maybe tone down a little on the torment you're putting poor Johnny though. He'll be locked up for good if you kep this up!
For the next one, maybe you should have it a little later on though...as in this one it seemed as if you meant that if Johnny was still in Jack and Will's time any more he'd be stuck there.
Plus, I like the long ones, when Johnny goes to Jack...rather than Jack going to Johnny. It makes it more interesting to see what they could get up to.
Keep it all up, cause this is truely wonderful work.
Kayez
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August 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This was awesome, thanks so much for the wonderful entertainment.
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August 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I'd forgotten how much I enjoyed this story. Congrats on the nomination, I'll be keeping my fingers crossed for you.
The only thing I didn't like and I don't in any stories, is when you changed Jack's appearance, made him look more normal. At that point he always ceases to be Jack Sparrow and I never seem to enjoy the story as much from that point on.
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July 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay. . . you mentioned that you wanted feed back and maybe ideas. . .
The story on the whole is good. I like the premises around Johnny and Jack being able to know each other. . .and the stuff with them being identical twins is really good. I got a kick out of the comment they made to Annamarie in chapter 4 that caused them to get slapped and their response to it. That was a very Jack Sparrow moment in my book. The vibrating bed was another thing that caught me as funny. . .I'd forgotten those things existed.
Chapter 4's dealing with the 'slave trade' was handled and depicted well. It is a sad situation, but unfortunately it did happen. You did a good job with showing the emotional responses between the two personalities. I would have liked to have seen some of Johnny's thought processes, but that is okay. I'm sure for someone so shy (as you mentioned on occasions) being put into that situation was more than overwhelming. The fact that Will didn't go and sack the port to get them back (as a typical pirate might) showed how much he cared about the two of them. Good job.
Couple of thoughts. . . I'm curious as to how Jack ended up in Johnny's house to begin with. . .Can Will or Van go back/forward too. . .Does Johnny seek out a Shrink? And a couple of others, but I wont prattle on.
I think you've done a very good job.ep uep up the good work.
The story on the whole is good. I like the premises around Johnny and Jack being able to know each other. . .and the stuff with them being identical twins is really good. I got a kick out of the comment they made to Annamarie in chapter 4 that caused them to get slapped and their response to it. That was a very Jack Sparrow moment in my book. The vibrating bed was another thing that caught me as funny. . .I'd forgotten those things existed.
Chapter 4's dealing with the 'slave trade' was handled and depicted well. It is a sad situation, but unfortunately it did happen. You did a good job with showing the emotional responses between the two personalities. I would have liked to have seen some of Johnny's thought processes, but that is okay. I'm sure for someone so shy (as you mentioned on occasions) being put into that situation was more than overwhelming. The fact that Will didn't go and sack the port to get them back (as a typical pirate might) showed how much he cared about the two of them. Good job.
Couple of thoughts. . . I'm curious as to how Jack ended up in Johnny's house to begin with. . .Can Will or Van go back/forward too. . .Does Johnny seek out a Shrink? And a couple of others, but I wont prattle on.
I think you've done a very good job.ep uep up the good work.
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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
To write so convincingly about activities that are not your cup of tea takes quite a bit of talent. Please keep going, even though it's not my normal cup of tea, your writing is so compelling that I want to see where this goes. My personal opinion: I prefer when Jack comes to modern times. I guess it's the bathing thing. lol
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April 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
the last one was great took ages to read tho but was still great. loved it lohem hem all shibby write more
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
So, ummmmmm, I wish I knew where you should go with this story, but I don't. I did like it however. I'm not big on the M/M action but I must say this was done quite well. I like how you added Johnny's family, and Will too. Oh, yes and "Fuckmook" is an awesome word. I also Love "Fear and Loathing" thanks for the great story! Keep up the awesome work.
-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful
-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful
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March 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey wikit story! lol keep on writing it! umm.. I'm gonna keep on reading it lol..ok taht sounded really lame so yeah lol.lol man that wasa long friggin chapter tho lol! can't wait for more!