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for Struggle For Control

by PiratesWench

person patch
schedule March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great story..keep up the good work.
person Jezrael the Overly Sentimental
schedule March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh.. my.. god.. that one scene when Mort was with Alex's beebee stuck in my mind so bad I started tearing up. I could see it perfectly. Julia's a little cutie with a huge smile, beaming at her new, oversized friend, while Mort fusses with her and the bear, one of those adorable smiles on his face (the sort that makes you want to just grab him and squeeze him. n.n AWW!)... Oooo! I loved this chapter!

..I can't take the suspense, however..

::Whines.:: Nooo.. I wanna know what's gonna happppeeennn..
person Jezzy the Jealous
schedule March 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awww.. so roh-mahn-teek.. *sigh*

You're going an absolutely spectactular job of keeping Mort in character. I don't think I could do it. I have a hard time with peculiar characters. Fantastico. n.n

You ioneioned in one of the previous chapters that this story might turn out longer that you originally planned.. Hurrah! That just made my day. I love long stories.

Keep it up!
person Jezrael the Jealous
schedule March 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ayyii! Mort can cook! I love it when guys can cook! We're perfect for eachother! :D!!!

*..ahem..* Anyway...

I check this story constantly now. I just love it! Alex grows on you. Yesterday I spaced and forgot that she wasn't actually in the movie.. LoL

Bravo! Keep it up!
person Jezrael the Jealous
schedule March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yes! A Secret Window fic! A bold step, being the first in a category. I hope you have set a trend. There are a lot of fic oppurtunities from that movie, I think.

I love your idea.. all of his 'sides' warring together internally. A beautiful thought. Intriguing, too. You keep it up! ..or I'll put a screwdriver through this here marshmallow! ::Waves the bit of white sugar-fluff around threateningly.::
person EyesofanArrow
schedule March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
WEEE!!!
person Jezrael the Jealous
schedule March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
EEEE!!! Mort is just such a cutie. Gotta love him.

But it seems like his side of this romance is getting a tad darker. OOoooo, the hick is starting to squirm his way back into Rainey's consciousness again? Not good! EEK! I wanna know what's gonna happen!

The chapter lengths are good! This has gotta be a difficult story to get out of your skull. Keep it up!
person EyesofanArrow
schedule March 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Dont worry, i wont be running away anytime soon . I LOVE this fic. I check for updates everyday. You are a very good writer.
person EyesofanArrow
schedule March 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wee! MORE MORE MORE!!!
person PipthePirate
schedule March 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story is great! I would really like to read more. Please update soon!
~Pip the Pirate~