rate_review Reviews

Wow...nice one...you have to write more 'bout them.

Continue this is some twisted yet cool shit. I like it.

Please, just lay off on all the unnessasary cursings! The story's good, but it had me laughing a bit. If you describe the main girl as some roughed up chick from the block, that would make sence, but just don't use terms repeatedly like Fuck, and boner. I laughd too hard when she said that to Freddy, he would have just rolled his eyes, wondered why he's wasting his time and killed her before she knew what hit her

This will be my second bit of constructive criticism--it's what I do.

Well, for one, sentence structure is something that is very important to make a story compelling to the reader. Some of your sentences need work. Don't get the idea that I'm writing this to have some sort of "revenge" for the decent review you gave my story. I really couldn't care less. It was written for my own pleasure, but I decided I would post it anyway. You need to work on your writing skills. Feel free to e-mail me and bitch me out or something. I don't care. You may handle things the way you want to. I'm just trying to offer my help... As for my story letting off quickly, there is another chapter in the making. Be patient! o-O! Once again, this isn't a flame.