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did not like it!

Go read "Forever, Anna" and see how your story SHOULD HAVE BEEN done...

...Um..Yeah...sure...okay...

It's lacking detail and sort of a plot and sense if you REALLY want to go there. Not to mention Dracula is OOC...he does NOT talk like that in the movie.

I think this face sums it all up: o O***
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Hey? Did you even see the movie? Cause everyone is out of character thus far. I mean yeah, Dracula is evil and all but the way you have him is way off. And not to be a pervert or anything but your sex scene could have been a hell of lot more better. Prehapes better detailed. And where is this story even taking place? And at that point of the story, Dracula no longer had three wives, only one: Aleera...and speaking of which, where is SHE in this story? She's the one who BROUGHT Anna to Dracula to begin with. And why is Anna dressed like a total scank? I mean sure, the brides outfits look like they got them from the gothic addition of the Victoria's Secret Catalog, but they aren't THAT fin rin reviling or bad for that matter. And is is this even going to fit in the original story? If Anna's already a vampire, then why would Dracula try to bite her at the All Hallow's Eve ball? Does this happen in a parallel universe or something? And why is Dracula speaking that way? He's suppose to sound formal and use rather big words...not sound like "Smy Cmy COOOOOOOOOOOOOCK!" He's more of a romantic...a heartless bastard but still a seductive romantic. Not a friggin sex-crazed jerk.

Fanfiction or not, this story should make sense. Watch the movie carefully this time--espically the PEOPLE IN IT--before you write a fanficition on it. I mean I have my own take of what happened to Anne those 24 or less hours she was trapped with Dracula--but this could have been a hell of a lot better and made A HELL of a lot more sense...

P.S: And his name as Gabriel VAN Helsing...not Van...and Van was never a nickname either.

Ouch... Update soon!

heey, I liked your story! Will you be writing more??

Holy God. st ost of all she didn't wish "Van" were there with her. For christ's sake did you even see the movie? His name isrielriel Van Helsing. Van isn't a first name, it's a portion of his last name and he is never referred to by this diminutive. Secondly, please enlist the aid of a beta reader. Preferrably one who has seen the movie since you apparently couldn't be bothered.