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June 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
LOL!!!! I'm really not awake yet this morning.. lemme recant those 'words of wisdome'.......
ACTUAL WORDS OF WISDOM *only after 3rd cup of coffee is away*: Men hate the words 'Don't' and 'Stop' UNLESS they are part of the same sentence!
*snort*...hahahahaha.. I've really gotta learn to wait until AFTER the 3rd cup of coffee before I review, or try to spell, or try to eloquate any form of correct thought..... HAHAHAHAHA..
Thank GOD it's FRIDAY!
ACTUAL WORDS OF WISDOM *only after 3rd cup of coffee is away*: Men hate the words 'Don't' and 'Stop' UNLESS they are part of the same sentence!
*snort*...hahahahaha.. I've really gotta learn to wait until AFTER the 3rd cup of coffee before I review, or try to spell, or try to eloquate any form of correct thought..... HAHAHAHAHA..
Thank GOD it's FRIDAY!
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June 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
>You know that Jack-Torture is one of my favorite pastimes...
Good girl! *g*
>You’re one of my favorite reviewers
*blush*
You must be an exception. Because many writers say clearly they don't want any flames, and from my experience many people count any kind of criticism as flames. Even if they say they were not at first.
>But my muses got depressed,
>and the story went south.
>I’m still hoping to save Jack from them
>because they keep wanting to kill him off
Once again I suggest that you hand those benighted muses over to Bootstrap Bill's ghost (who appears to be somewhat neglected as of late, if I may point this out).
They are not good for you if they can get you depressed, and they are certainly not good for Jack. You need your good old inspiration demon who might get the (brilliant) idea of Jack as a breeding slave more to the point while keeping him alive.
>and I tend to release a chapter at a time when I get “enough reviews”
Why do you torment us so?
>I'm looking for what you find WRONG with this story
Nothing, as far as I noticed.
I'm curious: what disease is it Angeline has, or does she fake it? But you surely will tell us in later chapters. (The other thing I wondered was: Is Jack wearing his slave-collar during the ball, hidden by a cravat, or was he allowed to take it off? *g*)
I would have dragged Elisabeth to some quiet corner instead of making that proposal in the middle of the room or so, but that's only me.
At a time before antibiotics and vaccion, on, having only one single child was a risky thing I think. Maybe Jack does not care, but other people might bring up the topic.
Now, please, post more!
You did not write the stuff to let it rot in a drawer, for depressed muses to dwell in, did you?
Good girl! *g*
>You’re one of my favorite reviewers
*blush*
You must be an exception. Because many writers say clearly they don't want any flames, and from my experience many people count any kind of criticism as flames. Even if they say they were not at first.
>But my muses got depressed,
>and the story went south.
>I’m still hoping to save Jack from them
>because they keep wanting to kill him off
Once again I suggest that you hand those benighted muses over to Bootstrap Bill's ghost (who appears to be somewhat neglected as of late, if I may point this out).
They are not good for you if they can get you depressed, and they are certainly not good for Jack. You need your good old inspiration demon who might get the (brilliant) idea of Jack as a breeding slave more to the point while keeping him alive.
>and I tend to release a chapter at a time when I get “enough reviews”
Why do you torment us so?
>I'm looking for what you find WRONG with this story
Nothing, as far as I noticed.
I'm curious: what disease is it Angeline has, or does she fake it? But you surely will tell us in later chapters. (The other thing I wondered was: Is Jack wearing his slave-collar during the ball, hidden by a cravat, or was he allowed to take it off? *g*)
I would have dragged Elisabeth to some quiet corner instead of making that proposal in the middle of the room or so, but that's only me.
At a time before antibiotics and vaccion, on, having only one single child was a risky thing I think. Maybe Jack does not care, but other people might bring up the topic.
Now, please, post more!
You did not write the stuff to let it rot in a drawer, for depressed muses to dwell in, did you?
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June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
yes, well... let's start with the fact that i am a moron. *massive, cooked-lobster-colored blush* and i realized it just after i submitted the review. i think i was confusing this one with another of yours, or another author's altogether. who knows? my (really dumb) mistake.
so, you want what's wrong with your story? erm, well, i seriously do look, because i'm constantly wondering how, if i ever get up the courage, a really good one of these should be. i compare fics with other fics and authors with others, and i really must say that you are one of the best out there - either that, or you have one hell of a beta (not to belittle your prowess or anything, really). i enjoy everything about almost all of your stories, and they're hardly ever coing,ing, or unbelievable, like some manage to be in abundance. i would have thought that i could find *something*, seeing as i have been in a roaring temper for a couple of hours, but i really can't, and i'm terribly sorry - you shouldn't be, though.
keep doing what you're doing, it's great. even got me mostly out of a lethally bad mood. if you can do that, for anyoned yod you're in the sixth chapter of a fic, quit looking for what's wrong and keep up with what's obviously right. if it's glaring, people will let you know.
so, you want what's wrong with your story? erm, well, i seriously do look, because i'm constantly wondering how, if i ever get up the courage, a really good one of these should be. i compare fics with other fics and authors with others, and i really must say that you are one of the best out there - either that, or you have one hell of a beta (not to belittle your prowess or anything, really). i enjoy everything about almost all of your stories, and they're hardly ever coing,ing, or unbelievable, like some manage to be in abundance. i would have thought that i could find *something*, seeing as i have been in a roaring temper for a couple of hours, but i really can't, and i'm terribly sorry - you shouldn't be, though.
keep doing what you're doing, it's great. even got me mostly out of a lethally bad mood. if you can do that, for anyoned yod you're in the sixth chapter of a fic, quit looking for what's wrong and keep up with what's obviously right. if it's glaring, people will let you know.
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June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hellbourne,
I like your stories because they have a darker sexual side, but also a lot of well meaning emotion. The H/C dilema. The characters are faliable and real. I'm interested to see where you are going next with the plot. Angeline seems to have lost some of her dangerous quality. Is she really evil? Does Will get to marry his bonny lass? I hope to find out soon!
Prolix
I like your stories because they have a darker sexual side, but also a lot of well meaning emotion. The H/C dilema. The characters are faliable and real. I'm interested to see where you are going next with the plot. Angeline seems to have lost some of her dangerous quality. Is she really evil? Does Will get to marry his bonny lass? I hope to find out soon!
Prolix
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June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
that is one of the GREATEST fanfics i have EVER read! you just have to write to the VERY end!
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ya know, i think i'm going to sue you for false advertising. ok, well, maybe not: you did answer a whole load of questions, but now you've set up a situation where i'm like, "Hey! what's going on over there?" because i know Jack's trying to be married (to Elizabeth?!), but it's a little off and i want to know what's happened to the Black Pearl in the meantime. don't tell me we're actually going to have to wait two years - that would be fic-wise - to see him back with Will.
oh, i know: i'll sue you for getting my hopes up about get gettig back together so easily (although, i should have known...)!
of course, if you wish to avoid this, post a new chapter of the same high quality ASAP.
oh, i know: i'll sue you for getting my hopes up about get gettig back together so easily (although, i should have known...)!
of course, if you wish to avoid this, post a new chapter of the same high quality ASAP.
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Lets see, what makes your stories worth reviewing? Hmmm, other than lust, depravity, and hoo hah dirt? Well, I would say, plot twists, great characterization, the way you have of making Jackfan2 go "NOOOOOoooooooooo!" yada yada. Personally, I like how the characters talk. For instance, Christ in a cannon. Has me cracking up everytime I read it. In this one, I very much like the relationship that Jack has with his sis. And I like how someone fly tly tells that Will git where to go and what to do with himself. Rash, turner, rash. Usually I dont like the 'all girl crews' and the pushy lady pirates----but I like this one, because they are just so cute about it. I do think it would be distracting, some, to have naked men wandering all over the ship, and as a matter of fact, last nite at dinner, i decided that it would not be a bad idea to have them wear waiters aprons when they serve dinner, and if you dont agrehen hen I guess you didnt see what Jackie dragged through your soup. For some reason, forcing Jack to breed hits me about as hard as whacking his wee wee. Terrible thing to do to my pirate. just terrible.
So who does he hook up with at the party? Is it who i think it is? By the way, the little blurb you have at the end that tells us to 'push the button now' is rather effective. Brava.
So who does he hook up with at the party? Is it who i think it is? By the way, the little blurb you have at the end that tells us to 'push the button now' is rather effective. Brava.
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Your story does have a lot of interesting twists. (Will Jack marry Norrington's sister?)
But if I were Angeline and near death, I'd have chosen a bride and arranged the marriage. If she lets him choose and court a lady it is bound to take quite some time which she apparently has not.
Besides, why Port Royal? Is there no Spanish, French or Dutch town nearby where Jack is less well known? She did not say it has to be English Aristocracy.
Concerning your review-question: No idea. For me, it's your begging. I don't normally review, because I think it's impolite to comment on other peoples' stories so long as I haven't written anything myself where they could retaliate with comments.
But if I were Angeline and near death, I'd have chosen a bride and arranged the marriage. If she lets him choose and court a lady it is bound to take quite some time which she apparently has not.
Besides, why Port Royal? Is there no Spanish, French or Dutch town nearby where Jack is less well known? She did not say it has to be English Aristocracy.
Concerning your review-question: No idea. For me, it's your begging. I don't normally review, because I think it's impolite to comment on other peoples' stories so long as I haven't written anything myself where they could retaliate with comments.
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ok, well, i just had a nice long encouraging review that got freakin erased by the wonders of not being able to connect to this site. dammit.
anyway, there was a bit about how good this story in particular is, what with the emotional and personality range of each character, and especially your very powerful and engaging OC; and then there was a bit about how i can't believe you can write so many good fics at one time; and finally there was a bit where i apologized for not reviewing and then yelled at you for teasing about the next part of this story.
the point of all of that - and the trying again, even - was to get you to please, please, please update this so i can see what happens next! i'm always checking this site aeavieaving disappointed because your fics aren't updated: see how you affect my day? get on with it!
anyway, there was a bit about how good this story in particular is, what with the emotional and personality range of each character, and especially your very powerful and engaging OC; and then there was a bit about how i can't believe you can write so many good fics at one time; and finally there was a bit where i apologized for not reviewing and then yelled at you for teasing about the next part of this story.
the point of all of that - and the trying again, even - was to get you to please, please, please update this so i can see what happens next! i'm always checking this site aeavieaving disappointed because your fics aren't updated: see how you affect my day? get on with it!
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
What makes this story so special? Hmm.. *think- think- think*
Over Pleasant Holiday, which I love by the way... This story has an air of uniqueness to it. Angelina, Jack's sister being an albina, yet his twin! It's a very fresh approach to the PotC story. Slash is done a lot and often with reference to Jack/Will/Norrington and the lot. Not that it's not enjoyable to read. Not that when it's done BADLY that it's VERY painful to experience. You write it all amazingly well. Both the Het and the Slash. I honestly don't think you could write them otherwise.
So, this story's freshness gives it added appeal and intrigue and I can't wait to see more. However, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DO NOT stop adding to Pleasant Holiday! PLEASE!
All your work is brilliant and you've an incredible flare for writing all the character in such a delectible way! Your Jack is heads and tails WAY above the rest.
Continue! PLEASE! Pleasant Hol AND AND The Siren. I beseach thee.
Ta!
Over Pleasant Holiday, which I love by the way... This story has an air of uniqueness to it. Angelina, Jack's sister being an albina, yet his twin! It's a very fresh approach to the PotC story. Slash is done a lot and often with reference to Jack/Will/Norrington and the lot. Not that it's not enjoyable to read. Not that when it's done BADLY that it's VERY painful to experience. You write it all amazingly well. Both the Het and the Slash. I honestly don't think you could write them otherwise.
So, this story's freshness gives it added appeal and intrigue and I can't wait to see more. However, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DO NOT stop adding to Pleasant Holiday! PLEASE!
All your work is brilliant and you've an incredible flare for writing all the character in such a delectible way! Your Jack is heads and tails WAY above the rest.
Continue! PLEASE! Pleasant Hol AND AND The Siren. I beseach thee.
Ta!