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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, loved it. absolutly loved it!!!
Held me captivated in your spell of writing from start to finish.
There really are no words to discribe it.
Masterfully done and I hope many more reviews upon you
Held me captivated in your spell of writing from start to finish.
There really are no words to discribe it.
Masterfully done and I hope many more reviews upon you
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Much better than the previous Twist of fates you wrote. The best take on Paris/Achilles I've ever read!
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October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow. that was good. I still feel bad for petroculous but that was great.
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October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the all the kind reviews. AFF had jumbled up some of the sentences and words which I've now repaired, including that all important disclaimer. So hopefully any remaining grammatical errors will be wholly mine - I'm a stickler for spelling too hehe :D
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September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello,
I've finished reading the first ch. I like the premise of the story, the idea that it was Paris who was captured, and not his cousin, so I'm interested enough to continue on. But I would like to make a suggestion, there are a lot of typos in your story that a spellcheck could fix, if you can't yet get a beta. So far, I think your opening and characterization is more interesting than most and your story deserves this extra attention to detail.
I'm not really a stickler for perfect grammer or spelling, but when there's so many obvious typos, I'd hate to not say anything. Someone helped my story by pointing those things out. I hope I haven't upset or offended you. The only reason I'm saying this is because I see some good potential in your writing.
Thank you
I've finished reading the first ch. I like the premise of the story, the idea that it was Paris who was captured, and not his cousin, so I'm interested enough to continue on. But I would like to make a suggestion, there are a lot of typos in your story that a spellcheck could fix, if you can't yet get a beta. So far, I think your opening and characterization is more interesting than most and your story deserves this extra attention to detail.
I'm not really a stickler for perfect grammer or spelling, but when there's so many obvious typos, I'd hate to not say anything. Someone helped my story by pointing those things out. I hope I haven't upset or offended you. The only reason I'm saying this is because I see some good potential in your writing.
Thank you
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my god... I am, quite nearly, speechless.
This has to be one of the most beautiful and poignant Troy Fictions I have ever read. Whileit closely follow the movie in plot, it manages also to exist with a life force all it's own. The characters are painfully complex and tragic and touched with a divinely faulted perfection that left me in awe. I couldn't stop reading if I had wanted to. Never once did you shirk on description or intracities, not even in the secondary characters, who were just as multi-faceted as the primary characters. And the way in which Paris and Achilles reasoned their actions was truly believable and without fault. They were consistant and they loved so beautifully.
I assure you, thi story has quickly risen among the ranks of my favorites, and I know I shall return to it time and time again to read it over. You have an exemplary control of the english language, weave words like the threads of a tapestry that is ultimately gorgeous and refined. I look forward to seeing even more from you as an author, as talent like yours is rare.
Sincerely,
Lacy Cotton
This has to be one of the most beautiful and poignant Troy Fictions I have ever read. Whileit closely follow the movie in plot, it manages also to exist with a life force all it's own. The characters are painfully complex and tragic and touched with a divinely faulted perfection that left me in awe. I couldn't stop reading if I had wanted to. Never once did you shirk on description or intracities, not even in the secondary characters, who were just as multi-faceted as the primary characters. And the way in which Paris and Achilles reasoned their actions was truly believable and without fault. They were consistant and they loved so beautifully.
I assure you, thi story has quickly risen among the ranks of my favorites, and I know I shall return to it time and time again to read it over. You have an exemplary control of the english language, weave words like the threads of a tapestry that is ultimately gorgeous and refined. I look forward to seeing even more from you as an author, as talent like yours is rare.
Sincerely,
Lacy Cotton
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is very, very romantic! The ending was very nicely done. I enjoyed it very much! Thank you!
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July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a beautiful, stirring, sensual and fierce tale you have woven... A most satisfying read. My thanks!
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have just found Troy fanfiction and this is a fabulous story! You have detail and a worthy plot--even believable faked death! I also enjoyed the fact that Helen was kept in the storyline and yet, Paris still succumbed to Achilles. Wonderful story and I hope you will write more if so inspired!
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March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN!! That was amazing! I LOVED it!! Captured from the first line, I loved the way the story was detailed and how the emotions were wrote. Few writers that I have read surpass you. Incredible!!