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for Menelaus's Revenge

by AvariNailo

person Erica
schedule July 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE continue this, I will review again! I absolutely love this and I don't think Paris should escape. But he should manage to get Helen away, that would be nice.
person ossy
schedule June 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I really liked your fic! I think they should go to Ithaca, and Odysseus should punish Paris - that would be cool. But Menelauus should punish him again too. Please make Paris cry! He looks so sweet when he's crying, its my favourite thing in fics. This is good, very hot and nice, i think you dserve a lot more reviews. please update soon! thank u for sharing your fic online.
ossy xx
person Ali
schedule June 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I vote we send Paris back to Troy after one more good spanking and let Menelaus take Helen to Sparta with him...never really liked any anyway lol ;D Maybe you could work in a Achilles/Patroclus chapter with spanking, that would be pretty. Good job and keep writing!
person Idon\'twantone
schedule June 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Aw, c'mon. Your fics not that bad. i like the one with hector spanking paris. when i saw the movie, i though that at any time, now, hector's gonna spank that bad boy.
person Blondie
schedule June 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good story! I think Helen should get spanked too, though. Maybe by Paris or Hector...;)
person Adulot
schedule June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good. You could benefit from the help of a beta, though. There are simple errors that could be fixed.
For example, it's spelled "Odysseus," not "Oddysus."
Just a suggestion -- instead of writing "smack" repeatedly to describe how many times Menelaus is hitting Paris, it might be easier on the reader and more interesting if you wrote something like,
"Menelaus brought his hand down repeatedly until Paris's skin was flushed pink."
person Anon
schedule June 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
is there g tog to be a chapter 2
person Darkmuse
schedule June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay...good start...but not enough....I hope there will be more soon....really soon.....

I wait with baited breath.....

Darkmuse