rate_review Reviews

Well, you def need to get a move on with this story! It's been a long time since you wrote anything!

This is a nice fic. I like how you introduce your female character as being someone Mort knew as a child rather than the more prevalent plot device of her being his new maid. I think the idea of Lizzy just turning up on Mort's doorstep as a full grown woman, and then, watching as he is forced to confront his burgeoning feelings for her is both an interesting and completely plausible scenario. The love scenes between the two were well written and sexy. I like how Mort attempts to ignore his feelings for Lizzy and how she forces him to express those feelings. I also like how you make reference to the voices in Mort's head, but you don't let them monopolize the story. I also like how you never mention Shooter. Oh, how I dislike him...ICK!!!! I believe Mort is decent, but he needs psychiatric therapy and medication. That would banish Shooter for good, and we would be left with decent Mort only...Hooray!!!! I also like the fact that you made Lizzy 26. That is a reasonable age for a relationship with Mort. And as another reviewer stated, the use of a condom was a nice touch too. I did see some spelling errors and minor grammatical mistakes, but they don't detract from the enjoyment of this fic. As an aside, I wouldn't mind seeing a sequel to this fic.

Pretty sexy!

Wow, that's a great love-scene. You did a really good job on that one.

Well it certainly is hot in here don't you think?

Oh WOW I LOVE this story!! You should DEFANITALY add more!!!!!!!!!!!

now thats....a good ending *grins* anyway, this is one of those stories that makes me wonder why anyone would ever give that man up!....*rolles eyes* some girls heheh.....*sigh* he's so cute when he talks to him self ahaha I don't know why I just like it.

That was great. I love that you left in a very important element of the real story...namely that Mort is crazy and hears voices. But aside from that, he's one sexy beast. Please keep writing...it literally makes my toes curl.

Nicely written. One of the best SW fics I've read. Any chance for a continuation of this story? Hope so. Would love to read more of your stuff. Good work.

I can thif thf three things that make this fic great.

1. You remembered the condom that most fics skip. Ok, it's not that big a deal in the fanfic world but you used it AND made it fit nicely (no pun intended.)
2. I love Lizzy! She reminds me of my cousin, Katie.
3. Johnny Depp sex!!!

10/10, wonderful job, kudos to you!