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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Greetings Ms. Debs,
Before I read your tale, I have something to say.
1) I respect the opinions of the first two reviewers, since they are wonderful, talented writers.
2) Although I'm a decent, humble writer still learning to be as good as they, I o
Before I read your tale, I have something to say.
1) I respect the opinions of the first two reviewers, since they are wonderful, talented writers.
2) Although I'm a decent, humble writer still learning to be as good as they, I o
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Your story is off to a great start.
The heroine, Bahiya, is gentle, romantic, humble, compassionate, non-judgemental, and quietly takes charge.
She shall be good for Erik. Please correct your grammar errors, such as "imagid." It is spelled "imagined."
The heroine, Bahiya, is gentle, romantic, humble, compassionate, non-judgemental, and quietly takes charge.
She shall be good for Erik. Please correct your grammar errors, such as "imagid." It is spelled "imagined."
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
While BRP is right with your Erik should be your Erik - I think PMEL's points can only improve your writing. The ONLY one who knew how Erik really was is Leroux since he created him. But your story is rushed and the girl is way out of character for a hist
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
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I respect the opinions of favorite writers because I learn so much from them. I partially agree with them, including the wise Carpathian.
Hear their advice, apply some or all of it, hold true to your beliefs, and keep on developing this promisin
I respect the opinions of favorite writers because I learn so much from them. I partially agree with them, including the wise Carpathian.
Hear their advice, apply some or all of it, hold true to your beliefs, and keep on developing this promisin
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
For the record,
I wasn't poking fun at fave writers whom were kind enough to provide advise before me, in regards to this story.
Or, at other writers whom also provide writing tips and express their opinions in polite, pleasant ways.
I wasn't poking fun at fave writers whom were kind enough to provide advise before me, in regards to this story.
Or, at other writers whom also provide writing tips and express their opinions in polite, pleasant ways.
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I laugh at reviewers that flame works in progress, don't have the balls to provide their names, don't write stories themselves, nor obviously ever get laid.
Ironically, I do appreciate some of their comments.
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Ironically, I do appreciate some of their comments.
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your story -- thanks for posting it. :)
I do agree with some of the earlier comments, particularly about the girl's frame of mind. I got distracted from the scene because I kept wondering how she could possibly be *that* self-assure
I do agree with some of the earlier comments, particularly about the girl's frame of mind. I got distracted from the scene because I kept wondering how she could possibly be *that* self-assure
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
Brava Miss Jane!
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Like you, I too like a dark Eric. I personally don't like for him to beat up his lovers, murder them, etc. But a bit of hair-tugging is nice. And spanking. And biting. And scratching. I put that in my stories, but sadly, I don't
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Like you, I too like a dark Eric. I personally don't like for him to beat up his lovers, murder them, etc. But a bit of hair-tugging is nice. And spanking. And biting. And scratching. I put that in my stories, but sadly, I don't
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
I liked that a lot - especially cuz I can imagine both Gerry's Erik and Kay's one in this beautiful story. And you have a wonderful style that kept the story from slipping into porn. ;)
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November 30, -0001 at 12:00 AM
And what the heck is going on here??? *lol* This is fanFICTION, guys, now come on and don't tear it apart like some old newspaper! Of course there were some strange thing in this story, but I enjoyed reading it, kept those thoughts to myself, and I enjoye