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This is excellant! The inner sturggle in Bumblebee makes it very interesting to read =)
And I see you're into co-writing =3

Doubt you'll leave this review up. I've been trying to quietly go through the moderator via direct email - but she's had some issues that have kept her from doing much on the net as of late.

First chapter of this story: http://movies.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=500000016

Is eerily similar to sixth chapter of this story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4216592/1/Rapt...4_Into_the_Fire

Look at the publish dates. The other one was published a year ago and last updated 10 months ago. I actually had to read several stories to find the scene that seemed so eerily familiar.

By the way the third chapter of this AFF story is very reminiscent of a story involving Wheeljack. But I can't remember which FF author wrote it. I'll search through my FF favorited authors this weekend and see if I can't find it. But the similarity is VERY striking in all the action/plot in that chapter. Second chapter also reminds me of a fic I've read on FF last summer - but I don't think I favorited that one so I doubt I can find it. I'll look when I have some spare time.

Oh wait, think I found the other story you seem to be tracking a tad bit too close to: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4206547/3/A_Spark_Torn_in_Two A lot of scenes and general flow of plot (AKA an Autobot being tortored by all the cons until he 'falls for' the one con who wants him) are eerily similar.

Guess your 'rewriting' whenever you find 'inspiration' by a FF torture story involving other TF canons. Unfortunately, your not changing the action enough to avoid plagiarism in my opinion. Or maybe you've got a picture memory and the prior stories you've read get mixed up with your ideas - but you're still writing them too darned close to the original.

Improve on your own merits, not those of other authors

Granted, I doubt you'll leave this up here. You don't want your readers to check out these 'eerily similar' stories which haven't been updated for almost a year - now do you?

The evolution of your writing is clearly expressed when you read Shadows of Tomorrow and then this. The sentences and paragraphs are a million times cleaner and much better writing. I definitely look forward to continuing to watch the evolution. And yes, some part of everyone loves suffering, so keep it coming.

Oh man poor BB, but damn that was a good chap. I love they way you write!

Oh man can't wait to read more.

Yay! It has returned! Thanks for putting this up. By the way, I'm a she and I do want to help, but I don't have an IM, only email. Let me know if there's anything I can do.

Awsome...this was great. Poor BB, I love that character so much. Can't wait to read more.