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March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good story. I am very impressed and I thought this one was actually worth reviewing. Most people on this site do not write very well, so it is a breath of fresh air to finally stumble across something that is worth reading. A few things I picked up on: uncomparable should be incomparable and when using the word "course" when referring to something harsh or brittle it should in fact be "coarse," but other than that, your spelling and grammar are almost infallible. Again, very good indeed.
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March 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg, i love your story, i just stumbled upon it tonight but i think it is BRILLIANT. please update it is wonderful and you are a gifted author!
-Shelby
-Shelby
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March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This story is sooooooo good. You wrote beautifully and I felt as though I were watching the movie. Awesome job. Please update soon.
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February 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I must admit the rape description was rather...realistic. I like writers who don't hold back and keep it real, graphic, like real life. I really enjoyed the graphicness of the chapter it kept my attention all the way through. You didn't over do it either just so you know. You can never over do it when it comes to such things.
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February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. It is the best Troy fic that I have read and I hope you will write more soon.
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February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love the story, great details!
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February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love your story
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February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh, i have a funny feeling about that dream they both had. Somethings bad gonna happen isn't it? Not good. But good chappie!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
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February 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*squeal* this is great! Beautiful language. Very elegant and poetic, and the plot's very believable. One minor flaw though: I think you use "though" a tad bit too much, but it doesn't affect the good story.
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February 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOOT!!! LOVE CHAPPIE!!!! UPDATE!!!!