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December 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HOLY CRAP!!!!! AWESOME CHAPTERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!NOOOOO HE RAPED HER THE BASTARD!!!!!*Does a repay, and helps achillies gut him* heheheehhe sorry, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!! BYE BYE!!!!^_^
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December 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Thus far, this is a very interesting story. The subject in itself is classical and faithful to the film and the legends. You treat it in a careful manner, presenting many characters and a complex action beautifully and in few chapters. That is a plus and I commend you for it. Personally, while reading it I found I could almost view it as a play, the dialogue very mythologic.
My only critique, and it is really picking on a small detail, concerns the use of the word "sir" at some point in your story to which I would object on the grounds of it being too 1800 rather than ancient Greek type of language.
Other than that, I liked it and I hope you will continue.
My only critique, and it is really picking on a small detail, concerns the use of the word "sir" at some point in your story to which I would object on the grounds of it being too 1800 rather than ancient Greek type of language.
Other than that, I liked it and I hope you will continue.
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December 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HEY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Thank you for updating these three chappies, I'm really enjoying your story so far. Please update soon, and keep up with the good work. ^_^
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December 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oooooo very good chappie. I hope he kills the bastard. I swear the king has to die. PLEASE DON'T LET ACHILLIES DIE!!!!!!Damn oooooooooooo please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^
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December 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Three words- MORE MORE MORE! Im loving this story you write the chracters so well and have such a great plot! This story is really emotional and has loads of depth. I loved the emotional moment between Archilles and Briseis.
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December 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i loved the movie troy, and ive been eating up all these fanfics about it, and i like yours too! i like how you're not moving too fast, but not too slow either, and keeping up w/ both the couple and what's going on back in troy. good job, keep it up. can't wait for the next update!! :o)
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December 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oooooo really good so far. Its nice to see her with a fighting spirit, but I wonder though what would happen in the future for both her and him. Would she despites him or love him. So many questions. So many possiblities. Hheheheheh good chappie. I love it. Going good so far, keep up the good work. UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^
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December 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HIYA!!!Ok i'll be honest with ya. I like and I hope to see you write more. Please update soon. I can hardly wait!!!!!!!!^_^
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December 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey i love this story! I love Achilles/Briseis stories and especially this one as you do a great job of writing Briseis charcter. You show her to be incredibly strong, and it works really well with Achilles character as well so keep going please! I love how you showed the reaction of her family to Briseis's 'death', which i think was lacking in the film. Update soon!
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December 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love it! It's original in it's own. You've managed to put a bunch of characters into the story in three chapters and I think that takes talent. I would love to see more of this, please continue.