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November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is great! I wanna read more!
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November 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My only complaint, after the third chapter; too much use of the word "giggle" (Like, once it alsready too often)
and nearly too much use of the word "Chortle" also.
Other than that- nice language, nice plot!
On to chapter four, darlin'!
and nearly too much use of the word "Chortle" also.
Other than that- nice language, nice plot!
On to chapter four, darlin'!
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this is really cute and pretty funny. I hope you are feeling better.
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i'm loving the story, 18th centruy jack and 21st century will are great together. i love seeing will as the one who knows everything and is telling jack how to do things! keep it coming! i cant wait for the next chapter!
meg
meg
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October 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story. Please continue. I like seeing how Jack would be in our time vs the 18th century. Very cool!
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September 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
M'dear, M'dear, m'dear....
So when does Jack realize that while there's STD's out there that there is still a lovely young man just waiting for him??
Hmmm?
So when does Jack realize that while there's STD's out there that there is still a lovely young man just waiting for him??
Hmmm?
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August 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You know what? I just read the whole thing and I love it!!!
//Sara
//Sara
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hopefully this is not a flame, but a constructive criticism.
Call me a perv, but a bit more - ahem - "action" for the dear Captain would be most appreciated.
Other than that, the writing is good and the story is enjoyable. Far fewer spelling and grammar difficulties than many. Characters could be a tad... erm, deeper. The humor is good. Just keep your audience here in mind -- we, or at least I do, want good writing laced with a lot of good smut.
There's that perv thing again.... sorry. But on that topic, if you ever want to add to the Jack/Johnny-Morpheus story, alert me of the update, that thing opened me up to the joys of slash... as it were... and how! Be sure to put AFF in the subject of the e-mail so I can find it in Hotmail's stupid junk-mail folder that it insists on putting every unknown e-mail into. I change my settings and it changes them back "for my protection". Gack!
BTW, you are not alone in the struggle with depression, we are legion.... whether most of us are willing to admit it or not. Just keep trying... yes, I know, depression is VERY trying.... 8^}
Call me a perv, but a bit more - ahem - "action" for the dear Captain would be most appreciated.
Other than that, the writing is good and the story is enjoyable. Far fewer spelling and grammar difficulties than many. Characters could be a tad... erm, deeper. The humor is good. Just keep your audience here in mind -- we, or at least I do, want good writing laced with a lot of good smut.
There's that perv thing again.... sorry. But on that topic, if you ever want to add to the Jack/Johnny-Morpheus story, alert me of the update, that thing opened me up to the joys of slash... as it were... and how! Be sure to put AFF in the subject of the e-mail so I can find it in Hotmail's stupid junk-mail folder that it insists on putting every unknown e-mail into. I change my settings and it changes them back "for my protection". Gack!
BTW, you are not alone in the struggle with depression, we are legion.... whether most of us are willing to admit it or not. Just keep trying... yes, I know, depression is VERY trying.... 8^}
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep up the good work mate....like where the story is headed. Want to read more...please....soon......
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July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pff! I luff this story! IT's like, so totally awesome. o-o;
The Disney thingy was hilarious. x3. It's rare to find a NEWLY UPDATED Pirates of the Caribbean(Seriously. Who is lazy enough to type out PotC?) fanfiction that I can grow attached to. Especially since I find both Orlando Bloom /and/ Johnny Depp to be the utter definition of HOT. x-X
Mwaha. :3 Keep goin', please!~
::~Double-katrillion-zillion-billion hearts, mate. oo;~::
Daaku. =^-^=
The Disney thingy was hilarious. x3. It's rare to find a NEWLY UPDATED Pirates of the Caribbean(Seriously. Who is lazy enough to type out PotC?) fanfiction that I can grow attached to. Especially since I find both Orlando Bloom /and/ Johnny Depp to be the utter definition of HOT. x-X
Mwaha. :3 Keep goin', please!~
::~Double-katrillion-zillion-billion hearts, mate. oo;~::
Daaku. =^-^=