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for Close Quarters

by dawnenab

person waitingpatiently
schedule January 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I've been waiting for you to update since the first day you posted! Great start. One of the best I've seen and I'm really looking forward to more, so get on it will ya? LOL. Please don't let this be one of those stories that just hangs out there, never getting finished. It deserves better than that. :) You've got us hooked so run with it.
person Lady of Winter
schedule January 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love the direction that you have taken. Personalities are true to form. Please keep updating! This is the most promising J/R that I have seen.
person Khemet
schedule January 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I like! I like! GREAT beginning! I really want to see where this goes...everything is ridiculously in character... Please update soon!
person Anon
schedule January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad. definitely continue.
person brina
schedule January 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent, excellent, EXCELLENT!! please please please update soon. Your writing style is excellent as well as your description of emotions and feelings expressed by both riddick and jack. I love the "thought" of each. please update soon.

brina
person jarbabyj
schedule January 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very nice. Great work on the Jack and Riddick story. i wish the writers of the movies paid attention to what the fans wanted. Can't wait for more!
person yelsha
schedule January 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE continue it! hurry, I am going through withdrawal! :)
person shivingdeep
schedule January 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yo Ali, I'M LUVING THIS STORY HERE!! You hit the shiv right on the sweetspot with Jack/Riddick's relationship. I'm a HUGE FAN OF JACK/RIDDICK... I feel the exact same way with these two and i'm glad you're writing this story. They have such an unusual yet powerful and intriguing relationship...it's so strong that you can feel it through the dayum screen. You're doing a kick a$$ job caputuring their feelings and you just gotta feel with riddie..lol. Poo BAby is really struggling..trying to resist his urges of getting unrestrained with Jack..lol. That's soo cute...PLEASE UPDATE SOON...
person florence
schedule January 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so....what r ya gonna do next? U should make Jack find them in "the act" and make him (giggle) beg for forgiveness.....or....make it so that the women makes Riddick see what Jack means to him and not ACTUALLY have him do anything with the other women.....or....make it so that Jack doesnt see them "doing" anything but maybe sees them talking and "touching" and draws the wrong conclusions, gets all hurt, and Riddick has to go find an explain to her....well there r afew ideas. hope to read ya soon
person bubblegirl
schedule December 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
nice work, i like the sexual tension, the grown up jack, the sassy woman and riddick of course! and yes please to another chapter.....or several ;)