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for Trapped in a Pyramid

by Jeremy86

person Leroy Jenkins
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon , this is great.
person Reui
schedule February 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE SOON.
person Lauren
schedule February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi Jersay, this a great story you are fulfulling a fanasty that many people may have. Keep it up. One comment I see that removed a story from this site because several readers had given you not so great reviews. Never let the thoughts of others stop you from obtaining a goal even fan fiction most of the readers here are probably underage. So their views are worthless.

I enjoy your work so keep it up. And make your chapters a little longer, I hate cliffhangers.
person Horny Devil
schedule February 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a naughty Yautja!! >:) I would... you know what.

I like this story! I thought I would never ever find a fanfiction of Predator like this... More close encounter between female human and male Predator. I have to admit that I always had a thing for the predators. Umm... Lex is lucky >:) she gets to do the "wild thing" with Scar! Is it just only me who has gone crazy to think that the Predator is hot (not that their don't look...attractive)?!
Ahem.....Anyway I do think YOU SHOULDN'T STOP WRITING NOW!! KEEP IT UP!!! I just can't wait to read more!! I hope Scar would protect Lex from Elders IF they are intend to to any harm to her. Scar would be the "romantic type"...(literary impossible, but it's a fiction, things could happen...maybe?)
Please DON'T STOP! COUNTINUE TO WRITE IT COMPLETE!

NEMESIS: "STARSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS" Translated: "I'm totally gonna fry your ass with my long, hard rocket launcher!!"
person Zel
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! What an awesome story! Extremely hot! And here's a cliffhanger... can't wait till next chapter.
person Tabby
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy Cow! A Predator and human female you have to be kidding me right? So there's a movie... No way man.... Dude....
I'm at a lost for words.
More...more this is wonderful.
Come on with the the next chapter.
person Kiwi
schedule February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This is really starting to get exciting. So what happens next? You must make Lex pregnant; you know that would really throw things into a loop. Jersay keep it coming.

And don't forget to add some more lemonsin the following chapters to come. Theres nothing more kinky than like reading about a Yautja beating up some ooman females stuff.

UPDATE SOON DUDE!!!
person Weird Angel
schedule February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww! You've stopped... Keep going!
person Semi
schedule February 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WHOA...Just a pointer guy about the Yautja. They refer to we humans as 'oomans.' Now that Scar is with the elders and he has explained the events that happened on earth, except for his nights of pleasure with Lex where will you take this?
This sounds like it could be a lengthy story that could be filled with action, adventure, and romance. Please in your next update explain what the fallout will be if any to Lex entering the counsel room. Poor ole Scar seemed to be shocked,mad, and afraid when the door opened.

I'd love to see the reactions on the faces of the elders,I hope that Scar stands up for Lex.


UPDATE SOON!
person Mona Cevas
schedule February 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon this getting to be really fun.

Stop all the cliffhangers, okay.