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(Invisible tail wags with insurmountable joy) I'm very very happy you like my idea. ^.^ (also dumps the drool bucket she filled up reading the latest chapter) I'm going to need two of those if the next one is steamier than that. My own fic is absolutely prude in comparison.

Wow this is great for the R rating you give it. I love it. I think this is not bad at all. Did you ever consider putting this on Fanfiction.net. They changed the rating and I have been seeing a lot of Lemon fics rated M there lately. Its the larger site and you might find yourself with a lot more followers. Trust me mmost my fics are rated M there. I was in a hiatus when they removed NC17 but when they changed the system and brought in M, I was able to put the fics I took down back up. Anyways I love this story please update soon. Please....

I LOVE your work! (wags the invisible puppy tail) I laughed so hard when Sara woke up and lit into the both of them. I also had a thought...(tail tucks between legs) You could have Michal be poisoned by Sara's blood. Only if you want to of course! Human blood has iron in it. My grams has to take suplements to keep the right amount in her. Slow poisoning is fun when it's done to the right idiot. And (whimper) I hope Crystal doesn't turn out to be too evil. I like her.

I am hooked on your story, you must write more! etc. *insert generic compliments here*. YAY. update soon!

Would you believe this is the second gynecological exam I've read for Sarah TODAY? And one of them was on the normal fanfiction site, not even rated M. There's something wierd happening in the world. Anyway, aside from the strangeness of any man trying to put a tampon in an unconscious woman, this is a very good story. I'm looking forward to another update soon. Seriously needs some J/S action (and no more imposter stuff, we likes the real thing!)

Not nice killing the police officer. Max deserves to suffer for a very long time. And you think women's hormones rage when their on their period, it's nothing compared to pregnancy. Trust me, I know.

waaaah i want more ;_; please update as soon as you've time. I need more Jareth :P lol

You are a great writer ^^

Great story.. I have one detail though you may have missed. Being that I love Labyrinth, I have also read the book associated to the movie and have these other details. Sarah's father actually is named Robert not Max. The woman in the movie is her step mother making Toby a step brother as it is her son. The original mother left Robert due to her acting career.She left to be with her costar a man named Jeremy who starred in many things at her side. It was for Sarah's 15th birthday that her mother gave her the music box, from which her ball gown was inspired. well anyways this is what comes from the novel by A.C.H. Smith, take it to consideration, use it, or ignore it, it is up to you, just thought I should bring it to your attention. Did I mention I like how this was written, you have put a lot of details in that make it hard for me to not get hooked, I look forward to the next chapter
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Omg this is the hottest fanfic ever ... lol You have me hooked at chapter four

Dude drama much? What is Max under a dark spell? OH is Sarah going to use her magic to stop the bult and nock out her dad? Man that would rock. The stroy thus far rocks but could you like give Toby back his arm?