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February 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A very interesting story, but it would be easier to read if you started a new paragraph after each character finished speaking. I'm definetly looking forward to your next update.
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude, this seriously has to be one of the best fics I have read, period. Id does sound like you are having a bit of trouble with english grammar. Is English your first language? I've helped a few people out with grammar before, and if you'd like, I would be glad to review your work and help you out with anything you may not be familiar with. Once again, amazing, incredible fic, and I dearly hope you continue it.
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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please keep Going!!! This story is great, and I want to read more about it!! Great plot, good characters, and you must have a great beta reader since I havn't noticed a single mistake in grammer, punctuation, spelling, etc. Keep up the great work!!
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June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Its good to see that other people hated seeing her die as much as I did.
Good writing, though the massive paagraphs are alittle hard on the eyes. Apart from that minor gripe, nothing else to moan about!
Keep it up, at leadt, when your computers back up again.
Oh BTW Vertigo, would you happen to like Ghost in the Shell: Stand Alone Complex?
Good writing, though the massive paagraphs are alittle hard on the eyes. Apart from that minor gripe, nothing else to moan about!
Keep it up, at leadt, when your computers back up again.
Oh BTW Vertigo, would you happen to like Ghost in the Shell: Stand Alone Complex?
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Im sorry guys, My computer is on the fritz, so im posting this on a friends computer to let you all know that its on hold until I can get the problem fixed. and I promise those of you that are wanting to wack off that you will be able to soon. I was writing up the sex scene when the computer died on me. But I promise you all that I will have it up as soon as the computer decides its given me enough crap.
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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
is there going to be sex?
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June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If there is no update soon, I will be forced to kill you.
J/k, seriously though, can we have an update soon?
J/k, seriously though, can we have an update soon?
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June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ack another oc character nothin new...
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June 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GREAT CHAPTER 4! LOL Tavin got slapped after being thrown into a wall! That's great! HAHAHA Liked the club scene with the dancing, and oh no a new Sith is spying. I am looking forward to more!
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it's a good story, but why is it rated NC-17? There's nothing in it.