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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it's a wonderful fic and I love it why won't you update it?
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really love the story, I checked this site over and over and over again to see if you had new
chapter. Keep writting and don't stop. If you want a review on your story, then I'll give it to you,
if it's only me.
chapter. Keep writting and don't stop. If you want a review on your story, then I'll give it to you,
if it's only me.
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I read the reviews and all I have to say is to keep your characters name and your title name. There is nothing wrong to
name your main character after you and this is YOUR story. There are some misspelled words,but I don't pay attention because
I correct it in my mind. I always go into the reader's mind, so you did a very good job.
name your main character after you and this is YOUR story. There are some misspelled words,but I don't pay attention because
I correct it in my mind. I always go into the reader's mind, so you did a very good job.
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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have to agree. Naming the main character after yourself is a blatant indicator of "wish fulfillment". It's called a Self-Insert, and, while nice for you, does not make for interesting reading for anyone else. I mean, who wants to read about some random earth girl's perfect avatar getting plowed by Anakin?
Your excuse is quite transparent, too. Your "friend" has your site password, huh?
Your excuse is quite transparent, too. Your "friend" has your site password, huh?
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August 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh huh, your "friend" did it while you were asleep. And it was just too hard for you to use the Find and Replace feature to fix the name. Riiiiiight. Pull the other one. Just admit this is your mastubatory fantasy and your writing a MarySue and stop making pathetic excuses.
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmmmm...
raunchy sex scene, they go back, padme is there, anakin goes back to being madly inlove with her, anger ensues...
do what you want with it i guess?
update soon!
raunchy sex scene, they go back, padme is there, anakin goes back to being madly inlove with her, anger ensues...
do what you want with it i guess?
update soon!
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If you are going to do a MarySue, at least give her a different name than yourself. Otherwise you might as well call this piece of crap "Wishful Thinking" or "My Fucked Up Fantasy".
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The idea of having Padme there is good....I'll try to work from that. As to using Rhiann for the character's name.... I had my friend review the story before I posted it, only I didn't have a name for her yet. So she thought she'd be nice and name her for me while I was asleep and post it. I didn't catch it until a few day afterwards so I just left it instead of going through and changing it.
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ayee...leave Anakin for Padme, place urself with someone else! -_-' The story was good, u pretty decent at writing just pair urself with someone else! Kay?!
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am having the biggest f**cking writer's block ever!! Any one got any ideas? Just thanking powers that be that I got more of Chocolate Dreams doen before this hit.