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OMG, your english and grammar is HORRIBLE!!! You need to learn to punctuate and your fic/story is very amateurish
and this from reading only 5 chapters..

I'll continue on reading but i don't know how far along i'll get; due to the ABOVE problems with this fic..
It's very frustrating to read when alot of the paragraphs are not understandable, AT ALL!!


You're obviously NOT an ENGLISH speaker and english isn't your first language..I'd appreciate it more
when authors are up-front about their english abilities instead of coming off as an english speaker; but that's me..

The only reason keeping me from continuing this fic is, one, this is an Anakin(might've spelled the name wrong) and Obi
slash/fic and i don't want to give up such a fic without at-least reading it through, and two, judging from the reviews i've
gone through, it seems that it's not that bad, except for the ENGLISH,GRAMMAR,PUNCTUATION, other-wise, it doesn't seem
all that bad to me..

Yay To You!
Write What U Want ^_^!

wow just wow. This is soooooooo good. I'm going to read part two right now.

OMG I love this fanfic so much! I can't wait to read the next one!

Great story I really liked this one. I look forward to the next story

Awesome story!! I cannot wait for the next one!!

sooooo.. where's the sequel?? :)

thanks for sharing... That was one weird story, but I had so much fun reading it!! hhihi
lina.

I'm rather sad this story is now over...though excited at the same time that there will be a sequel. I've REALLY enjoyed reading your fic and seeing how the plot went. Writing about males giving birth is a tough one...and you did a good job with it. It was kind of hard to follow at first...there were so many characters that it was difficult to keep track of them. But it definitely didn't take away from the story.

One thing I could suggest is not retelling the stories over and over. Anakin kept telling the same stories to several people several different times. It made the story seem extra long (at least to me) when after a story was told it could be summed up when needed to be repeated. But again it didn't take anything from the story...it is just a suggestion.

I especially loved the humor in this fic. Apparently Anakin can be quite a handfull when moody...poor Obi-wan. He definitely must love him. *laughs* And I loved all the tender moments...made the story seem more real. I was hoping for a little more action to show how great a team those two are...but I understand that would be rather complicated when one of the team is carrying quadruplets! Yikes! Just wait until those four start walking...BOY are the men going to be BUSY! The names were lovely!

I'm so looking forward to the next story...I want to see more of Obi-wan and Anakin and how they will handle Palpatine. And I want to see how the relationship with Luke and Sirceus proceeds. Great job and so looking forward to more. Keep up the cool work!

i think you should put up the chapter tonight and then do the sequel tomorrow! whatcha think?

This story just keeps getting better and better!! You are a great writer and its obious that you put a lot of time and effort into your chapters!! I just hope we get some more Ani/Obi smut!! I wouldn't mind seeing the handmaidens getting it on too!!