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for Jaded

by rothalion

person yeah
schedule August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i liked it! that's all i can say!!
person seraphina-not signed in
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice job showing a good dynamic between the two. Just be careful with tenses though; you suddenly changed to present tense in the last couple of paragraphs.
person kruemel
schedule July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
such a beautiful, romantic and colourful story. i love the artful and detailed way you describe your scenes.
person Jar
schedule July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Impressingly beautiful. I loved every bit of it!
person Morningstar
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a nice romantic little piece. Liked how Hephaistion regularly plotted the annoying king's death. Add humour to the situation. The last part was a nice reflection of the way they complement eachother.