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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAAAAAAAAAAYYYY!! BlueMagic[& wonderful friend] writes again! Damn, women, my home computer is deader than that proverbial nail, so I'm reading this in the public library. Absolutely bizarre keeping a straight face while reading this fantastically hot story. The drive home is a damn chancy thing too. But I will survive.... unless you don't write more SOON! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!!
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
An interesting title.... Not an easy read. Rather than on anorange box I was hiding behind a coil of rope and the main mast.
As you say definitely different to Surprises. I have read it twice now and understand it. But I am uncertain whether readers unfamiliar with both of you and your writing and your fics, will find this accessible. Not only because of the style of it, which you have explained admirably in your notes, but because of the content. I feel it takes some knowledge and your average fanfic reader is after an enjoyable easy fix, an open story, which this isn't, far more personal. Having said that, it is clever and interesting.
I loved reading again your rendition of Jack Sparrow. So wonderful to have again your descriptions of him and the way you portray his voice. Simply perfection. I liked especially the "at your service and I do not say that lightly." bit, although I loved everything you had him say. Spot on. Also the relationship between him and Kate was extremely powerful. Sparrow is yours. Of that there is no doubt.
Forgive my nitpicking Virgo mind, but there was an instance in the first part where I think you left out the word "truth" during something Kate said and a part where I assume you left in an aside to each other during the writing, where you discussed the sentence structure and the word "desire." I agree it reads better if you change the order there. Also in part two I think Eva meant to write the word "bank" instead of back. Maybe I should be your beta. :)
Anyway not an easy read but beautiful. I love as ever your seafaring metaphors. Good luck with this story. It is unusual but special. I will jump back overboard again now to drown.
As you say definitely different to Surprises. I have read it twice now and understand it. But I am uncertain whether readers unfamiliar with both of you and your writing and your fics, will find this accessible. Not only because of the style of it, which you have explained admirably in your notes, but because of the content. I feel it takes some knowledge and your average fanfic reader is after an enjoyable easy fix, an open story, which this isn't, far more personal. Having said that, it is clever and interesting.
I loved reading again your rendition of Jack Sparrow. So wonderful to have again your descriptions of him and the way you portray his voice. Simply perfection. I liked especially the "at your service and I do not say that lightly." bit, although I loved everything you had him say. Spot on. Also the relationship between him and Kate was extremely powerful. Sparrow is yours. Of that there is no doubt.
Forgive my nitpicking Virgo mind, but there was an instance in the first part where I think you left out the word "truth" during something Kate said and a part where I assume you left in an aside to each other during the writing, where you discussed the sentence structure and the word "desire." I agree it reads better if you change the order there. Also in part two I think Eva meant to write the word "bank" instead of back. Maybe I should be your beta. :)
Anyway not an easy read but beautiful. I love as ever your seafaring metaphors. Good luck with this story. It is unusual but special. I will jump back overboard again now to drown.
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
p.s. forgot to say, the line. "neither of them who they were before " made me cry.