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January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I really enjoyed the second chapter. Update soon :)
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August 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start, though I can see that you probably gave up on it... I do have one critique though, when writing a story it's best not to cut anything short, looks less professional that way, instead of using and ampersand (the &) spell out and. The only other thing I saw was the misspelling of clothes, which is a common mistake. Anyway it was a good start, if you ever deside to pick her up again.
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July 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you should update this!!!
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like this pleas keep going
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heh, cool
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October 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice start but shouldnt she be a little more apprehensive about her surroundings? She seems pretty calm after everything that's just happened. Great start though! Keep up the good work =)
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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehe this made me laugh...im not quite sure why...oh well, i like it and want more please!
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey, i liked it so far. update soon, i wanna know what happens next. lol.