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for Open Your Eyes

by amistillill

person Anon
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Write more?

I enjoyed it.
person Lady Rain
schedule September 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent job! I could see it play out in my mind so perfectly the way you wrote it! I'm impressed!

I do hope you write some more, that Jack is one sexy beast! ^_^
person Cleta
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story didn't need an R rating.It was great just the way it was.I'm looking forward to reading more.
person Lyndsay
schedule August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lovely. Update soon.
person Angel
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww that was sweet :)
person chippi
schedule August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey, i liked the story, are u gonna continue it? if u do update soon, lol. :)
person crooke
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love your you/jack stories! your last one was amazing I wanted it to go on forever (im still crossing my fingers for a continuance) this one looks promising as well!, please , more, lol.
person Ebony
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really, really enjoyed this piece, it had such wonderful emotion in it and good characterization. You conveyed the feelings and emotions perfectly without the help of much dialogue, which I've always found a talent worth praising. If you can think of a title for this, I'd like to publish it - but only with your permission, naturally - on our site called 'Opportune Moment' (http://www.opportunemoment.net), a site that hosts only Jack/You fiction.

Excellent work!
//Ebony
person Line
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Screw the R rating, this was absolutely beautiful! I repeat...wow!
person Mya
schedule August 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No, don't worry about the R-rating, it worked the way you wrote it. I couldn'tve imagined her going through with it at that moment, her feeling the way she was feeling. I hope it does eventually happen though, Jack is perfect for her erasing the evil fiance. ;) Hope you continue, you have a great writing style that flows easily.