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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
[tunnels in, still winded from the last story] Oh, hey, and that's right, they've both got SUITS on in this one! Woohoo-- score one personal kink jackpot for the Gerbil!
>Then he planned on fucking Crane against a wall until he screamed.>
...Mmm.
Oh-- nice tempo, too, coasting off from a big paragraph with a punchy line like that, too. (Still, mmm.)
>Only Bruce Wayne would be stupid enough to do that.>
Like that line, too...
>He unleashed the rolling grin that had melted scores of exotic supermodels and at least a couple district attorneys.>
Heh, nice callback to Two-Face there!
>Bruce cocked an amused eyebrow. “Do you get cold easy?”
“I like layers,” Jonathan said, his eyes hooded with desire and contempt.
“Me too.”>
Crane isn't the only one who can wield a bit of wordplay, I see. [smirk]
>The doctor had the eyes of a predator despite having the perfect body of prey.>
Wow. That sums up a great deal of movie!Crane's character, right there. Just _nails_ it.
The sex scene in this one is good, too. No messing around with the purple prose a lot of guy/guy fics can easily get bogged down in-- just good ol' fucking, with a masterful happy-medium of play-by-play and dialogue to keep it alive. Not even mentioning Scarecrow's easily-in-character thing for biting and snarling orders once he's (debatably) got the upper hand, and how those orders are to show his own body no mercy... This is one great 'topping from the bottom' example you've written, here!
>caramel voice>
Ooh. Nice word choice.
All in all, I like how both of them end up "winning," in the end.
[collapses with that, spent for the night]
>Then he planned on fucking Crane against a wall until he screamed.>
...Mmm.
Oh-- nice tempo, too, coasting off from a big paragraph with a punchy line like that, too. (Still, mmm.)
>Only Bruce Wayne would be stupid enough to do that.>
Like that line, too...
>He unleashed the rolling grin that had melted scores of exotic supermodels and at least a couple district attorneys.>
Heh, nice callback to Two-Face there!
>Bruce cocked an amused eyebrow. “Do you get cold easy?”
“I like layers,” Jonathan said, his eyes hooded with desire and contempt.
“Me too.”>
Crane isn't the only one who can wield a bit of wordplay, I see. [smirk]
>The doctor had the eyes of a predator despite having the perfect body of prey.>
Wow. That sums up a great deal of movie!Crane's character, right there. Just _nails_ it.
The sex scene in this one is good, too. No messing around with the purple prose a lot of guy/guy fics can easily get bogged down in-- just good ol' fucking, with a masterful happy-medium of play-by-play and dialogue to keep it alive. Not even mentioning Scarecrow's easily-in-character thing for biting and snarling orders once he's (debatably) got the upper hand, and how those orders are to show his own body no mercy... This is one great 'topping from the bottom' example you've written, here!
>caramel voice>
Ooh. Nice word choice.
All in all, I like how both of them end up "winning," in the end.
[collapses with that, spent for the night]
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November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
"Today he would let himself be Bruce Wayne, a man used to indulging in the finer aspects in life. He’d allow himself to wallow in Jonathan’s beauty, to explore his body and show the doctor that he wasn’t just an animal.
Then he planned on fucking Crane against a wall until he screamed."
That is the single sexiest thing I've ever read. Keep up the awesome work; please write more!
Then he planned on fucking Crane against a wall until he screamed."
That is the single sexiest thing I've ever read. Keep up the awesome work; please write more!
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August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
abso-frekaing-lutely genius!!!!!!!!!!!!
keep keep keep writing
keep keep keep writing
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August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this series. You simply have to continue. And be as evil as evilly possible to Johnathon! He's a sick little bunny he can take it.
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August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooooh, yes, sir!!
Please write more!! This is sooooo hot!! :)
Please write more!! This is sooooo hot!! :)
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August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this made me so happy! Can't wait for more.