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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5 was really well done! There were some really fantastic lines that just worked fabulously- including the last line. I thought Anakin's implicit expression of guilt was really good- in typical Anakin fashion, wouldn't come out and admit what he'd done was wrong, but communicated to her he was sorry all the same. Well done! Another thing, before I forget- thank you for writing a Padme that doesn't immediately cave to all of Anakin's sexual advantages- it's nice to see a woman who thinks with her head. Really looking forward to reading the next post- btw, have you considered joining AAEF (yahoo group that specialises in this pairing)? I'm sure the rest of the group would appreciate this story.
-eridani
-eridani
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a breathtakingly beautiful story. Truly amazing!
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent chapter. Really great i cannot wait for you to go on i know what happens next yet i cannot wait to find out through yours
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good for you for continuing it. You've got a backbone, I like that. I'm very interested to see where you take this now. Good job.
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for continuing~you have more fans than you realize :)
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No, don't delete this story! I like it very much, it's original and interesting: I like a dark Anakin and I can't wait to read more!
Please keep going ^^
Please keep going ^^
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No, don't delete this story! I like it very much, it's original and interesting: I like a dark Anakin and I can't wait to read more!
Please keep going ^^
Please keep going ^^
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You are right- Part 2 has some of the best written material in this story so far.
God, dont shut down this story! Please! Believe me, this is far better than the majority of illicit A/P material out there. In fact, I'm really quite enjoying reading this story- and I'm glad your writing is coming at a pretty steady pace (regular updates are just the best thing in the world). How did the 'love' scene, as you put it, go? I thought it worked very well and considering it's the first time you've written that sort of thing, a really excellent effort.
The evolutin of Pernea to Padme worked very well- and I thought the quote at the beginning of Part 2 was especially effective in that change. It immediately made me consider the "dreams" as rememberances, though you hadn't explicitly made that point yet.
Great work so far- I can't wait to see what you do with this, and I hope you update soon!
God, dont shut down this story! Please! Believe me, this is far better than the majority of illicit A/P material out there. In fact, I'm really quite enjoying reading this story- and I'm glad your writing is coming at a pretty steady pace (regular updates are just the best thing in the world). How did the 'love' scene, as you put it, go? I thought it worked very well and considering it's the first time you've written that sort of thing, a really excellent effort.
The evolutin of Pernea to Padme worked very well- and I thought the quote at the beginning of Part 2 was especially effective in that change. It immediately made me consider the "dreams" as rememberances, though you hadn't explicitly made that point yet.
Great work so far- I can't wait to see what you do with this, and I hope you update soon!
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August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good I cannot wait to see next where you go. Earlier i saw what you wrote and was dissappointed. Glad you are going to keep going
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August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm intrigued! Unfortunately well written stories with actual evident plots are hard to come by around here, but I think this one is definitely going to be one of them. The sense of anticipation in the prologue was handled well, and I liked how Padme and her ?reincarnated? personality evolved smoothly in the first chapter. Hope you update this soon, because it would be a shame for a good quality story like this to go unfinished.