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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please finished this story everything you write i read so please write something very good in the next chapter soon.
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September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really loved this one - please continue? It's delightfully dark =)
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love it so far! keep writing! ^^
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Me like very much. I'm very interested in seeing how this developes. Great start to the challenge!
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it! Keep writing more!
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September 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really liked the way you described the flow of emotions she felt when the Goblin King walked through her. That was really creative. Update soon, I can't wait to read more. :)
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September 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's an interesting start but I do have one complaint. You started this story in third person perspective and then switched to first person. This is extremely confusing, please pick one and stick with it.
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September 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
a very nice start. your story contrasts nicely to the one begun by Evilkitten. I eagerly await to read what you both come up with. I noticed how you were able to keep Sarah's reactions innocent enough for a young girl, yet knowledgeable enough for a teenage who has most probably gone through sex ed. Great Job!
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September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh... man.. nice start. You will have to read mine... lol. We can be eachother's cheer groups. I like the detail and I like the harshness.
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September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So far so good, looking forward to seeing where you take it.