rate_review Reviews

Yet another nice update. I am happy, of course that they have done it. And I am very interested to see where you are taking this. Please update soon. I look forward to reading what you have in store for these wonderful creatures of pleasure. LOL

Kittenn

teehee... that was funny! Love to have more of it... *wink wink nudge nudge*

Wonderful work. I enjoy the thought of Hoggle being evil. But I am can't await to find out what poor Ludo and noble Sir Didymus did. Please continue.
I am sorry yo hear of your lost. May your uncle rest in peace and may you find some comfort in your time of grieving.

I loved this story. Your characterization feels right, and the plot is new and original.

Please continue?

Like the movie, the beginning of the piece starts at a calm and floats along in a whimsical air, but also like the film, it's not long before Sarah finds herself intangled with the bussiness of the magical world, which is something that may or may not be a positive. To see how Sarah continues her life after the events of the original is interesting and compelling, but I simply felt that the appearance of magical figures came all too sudden and abruptly ended the beginning segment.

Your piece seems to lack the innocent, magical charm that the original was so chaulked full of, but that may have been your intention, and it seems to fit well in Sarah's new, adult world. Sarah has developed without changing too dramatically, but it still suprised me to see her start to weep so early in her most recent adventure. I remember her being distressed in the film, but never bursting into tears.

I have mixed reactions on the liberties you took with the characters. I find the idea the semi-villainization of Hoggle and the rest to be interesting, but I find Sarah's need to try and justify Hoggle's actions to be out of character, and would have seen her taking the denial route longer and more emotionally. I would say something of Jareth, but I suppose that in the film we really only see him in one context, so it would be unfair of me to say anything or to criticize any liberties you might take with him.

Overall, the piece was written very well with more than the slightest hint of mastery. The the things that bothered me were really continuity issues, but other than that, I can see this piece forming into an epic of a mini-novelette.

-Liam Lovewright

Your story is interesting. Good premise. An evil Hoggleand friends? Nice. Keep up the good work.

Another nice update. Ya know, now that I think about it, I guess I could see Hoggle being a little twit like that that. But it still seems so wrong for them to be criminals. I am *LOVING* the story though. Keep up the good work and I can not wait for the next chapter. I am dying to see what the crysatl is on her pillow.... so many thoughts, so many ideas. *grins*

And I am sorry about your uncle. I hope everything goes well and may he rest in peace.

Kittenn

I am absolutely loving this story so far, and I can't wait for the next update. I am very sorry for your loss, and I wish you all the comfort in the world.

ooh pretty good so far. I cannot wait to read more and see why she was accused of this. update soon please ^^

Its good very good.