rate_review Reviews

I have to say i am quite disappointed with this. Not that its a bad story. Just the spelling mistakes and grammar. Also i hate to say it but the best way to ruin a story is to use text talk. dont use w/ when you want to say with. i mean u dont tlk like this in r/l do u? Im not trying to be mean, i love the story line so far, but you need to use word or notepad and fix up your mistakes before posting.

Lady Linwe

Just one other thing i would like to suggest for posting requirements. Read the requirements set out by opportune moment. They are a second person point of view fan fiction site and the requirements are good to follow for any story. The link is http://www.opportunemoment.net/submissions.html

It explains also a bit more about what i was trying to say in my last post about text talk

Good start, but go back and get rid of the short hand like b/c and stuff. But other than that you have a good beginner for a story here.

I'm sorry I really wanted to read your story, but the terrible spelling and mis-use of words wouldn't let me. ruff? rough and so on. I wish I could read it, I really do.