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hmmm the plot thickens...

Sorry I don't have time for a long review, but I liked the momentary confusion at the very beginning of the chapter. Quite intriguing. I look forward to seeing how this pans out.

eridani

Good story! I can't wait for more!

wow. padme is alive? hmm... this just makes the plot thicken. vader is going to kill them all!

Yes ilove it been wondering where this is going

It's been awhile since i reviwed this- however, I have been reading faithfully.

As always, you do inner conflict so well and seem to specialise in the savage kind perculiar to Vader's situation.
On a technicality: I know it was a surreal sequence at the end of the chapter, but you could have used less ellipses and dashes. Too many of the sentences had incomplete endings, which makes their effect less when you use them.

Otherwise everything was wonderfully done.

It's me again and I love the story!!! I really like how you put the slave's pov in the story because it gives
us a clear idea of what she went through and how she felt about the situation she is in. I wonder if she
is going to fight him or stand up for herself because let me tell you, if that was me, I bash his head against cuz
I AIN'T HAVIN' THAT!!! LOL.

I love it ! more please !!! :)))

Great work. I enjoyed the Slave Girl's point of view.

I love this story but I have to admit I was a little disappointed with the update - but only because it was mainly a rehashing of the previous chapters from the slave's pov. There just wasn't enough new stuff. If you're going to switch to the other character's pov, you need to make sure you either go into some new plot areas OR you give some new juicy details and not just go over what has already transpired. It was a bit too much of her just retelling what we already knew happened. I'm only telling you this because at the beginning of your story you asked to be told so you would know what you are doing wrong or right. Cheers!

I love this story!!! Update soon.