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please,please put up more chapters im realy getting into the story i dont want that to be where it ends your such a talented writer im inlove with the story keep up the good work

more please!!!

Well your story is interesting. You go in depth to describe things. A little too wordy sometimes, but it can be cut. Also I find myself having to pay extra attention because some parts get very confusing. Like when they are telling the story of the past and you switch to the present. Also there where some grammatical errors. But all in all it has potential. I suggest revising it or getting someone to look at it before submitting. It makes all the difference. The new race, Dreitans are they space vampires? I'm not sold on them. But the story is pretty cool. This is me being constructive. Don't take offense.

this is awsome!! please write more! an update soon would be heaven and i have one question about kelly's dream that she had towards the beginning of the story ( i just caught up with all of the chapters) is she gonna have two mates or was that ki'taka and kien'ata that she saw or ki'taka and some one else? i wanna know please!!

a very wonderful story. i hope to see more soon!!!!!

Hello shortest_warrior. My parents are doing better now. Thank you for asking. I can't remember how I spelled it but I changed it to "Sjo'ren". I hope to see anothr story from you. I love all the stories...please please please...with candy coated Preds on top...hahahaha. ,,,=^..^=,,,

As I've told you time and time before, I cannot wait until you update this one (and your other stories, too). =) There's so much going on and many people (Yautja and human) involved, it just draws you into the story. Hoping your update will be soon, k, Shorty?

the story is great, getting writing babe

Hi Spider, yes I'm going to return. I'm fixing up the story and hopefully making it better. I've also had a bunny hopping around in my head for a third story and at the moment I can't seem to get anything else done but it out and I hate/love it. I want to have at least the number of chapters I've already posted fixed up and ready to go, but I maybe persuaded otherwise. I've got a few done but I'm getting some of the girls to read over them. I've fixed up my comma stuff ups as Lorna will aggree now all I've got is fragments. Oh well! I'm only Ooman right.

Are you ever going to post again the answer you should return wit is YES.