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for In the Heart of a Warrior

by JulieL

person Chancelor22
schedule October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep the updates coming! I am really into this story and I can't wait for the next chapter to hit the net!
person Nahau
schedule October 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this chapter, it was really good. I can't wait for the next chapter.
person silentVoid
schedule October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL, that was funny! Good work
person Mal\'fan
schedule October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update. Good job!
update again soon, it's really intresting
person Chancelor22
schedule October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good. Now I must have more. I will perish without more! MORE! Keep up the great work. I really, really like this story. I check for updates like 4 times a day! Can't wait.
person circle of addictions
schedule October 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was great! Please update soon
person silentVoid
schedule October 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Is that it?
person lorna
schedule October 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was cute. please continue i am interested in what will happen next
person silentVoid
schedule October 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry ^^;; The Chapter was cut off for a second and I thought you only had a paragraph.

Anyway, I like this chapter!
person Nahau
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The concept for the story is amazing. But you might want to go back and edit. Some of it was hard for me to understand, mostly due to grammar. Don't feel bad though, my grammar sucks far worse. Anyway, you might want to go back and reword some of the story and give it more vocabulary. Like the word whore, I'm not saying you shouldn't write it, I just think you shouldn't use it over and over again. But this your story and not mine. Thanks for sharing and I like the story, I'm sure you will improve.