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March 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Pls put up the next chapter of Forbidden now that AFF is operational again!!!!!!!!!!!
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story please update please!
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January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
PLEEEEAAASE update! *pouts* Pweeze?
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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it so far - please, more soon!
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January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dear R, I love this story, it is both sensual and loving in it's repose and I have enjoyed reading every bit of it. I am really looking forward to your update. To put it simply, I can't wait to read it. More please and soon.
Sue ;)
Sue ;)
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damned FF.net, Forbidden is not there anymore!! BAH!! Good thing for AFF.net :-)!! I love this story too much and I can't wait for an update. BTW, My FF.net nick is Missnaye :-).
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, could you email me when you update?
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i have to say.. i have mixed feelings about this piece.
there are many of the concepts that i do like, in particular, luke's submissive nature, his fixation on his father from a young age, vader's domination of him, and the utter hotness of the two of them together. i think i liked it better when it was of questionable consent, but luke's craving of what he still sort of considers to be wrong is beautiful.
but to that, i find myself turned off by a number of things. i feel that you lost out on the oppertunity to have a lot more drama by making yoda and ben conspiring to kill luke and basically 'evil' in terms of the plotline.. and don't bring up the doing it for greater good argument, that's still making luke into a princess. having them really wanting luke on their side for their beleifs instead of making them into bad guys to just be disobeyed as traitors simplifys so much, keeping things basically black and white but reversing it. that was probably my biggest problem with it, but also, great power comes at great cost. vader sacrificed so much of himself to have his force powers, palpatine did also. they were once normal men but their power corrupted them. likewise, luke and yoda and ben required a lot of meditation and a lot of work to get their powers, so giving vader and luke amazing omg !!! powers all of a sudden seems like a cop-out. even if the cost for luke to use healing would be to kill something else (in Carnivale, ben must kill birds or fish to heal broken bones or bring life to a dying man), there should have been a cost, i think. it would have been more credible. i think your luke is a bit too girly, especially with the uncle owen beat me as a child and that's why i'm submissive argument (i know yours isn't that extreme, but its in that direction) but i think you justify it enough.
i have the list only because i so loved the idea and some of the emotions you bring up, especially the wrongness with the incest, the darkside/lightside conflict.. and the sheer hotness of it. just some of the details got in the way.
now i want to do a similar themed piece.. hmm.
there are many of the concepts that i do like, in particular, luke's submissive nature, his fixation on his father from a young age, vader's domination of him, and the utter hotness of the two of them together. i think i liked it better when it was of questionable consent, but luke's craving of what he still sort of considers to be wrong is beautiful.
but to that, i find myself turned off by a number of things. i feel that you lost out on the oppertunity to have a lot more drama by making yoda and ben conspiring to kill luke and basically 'evil' in terms of the plotline.. and don't bring up the doing it for greater good argument, that's still making luke into a princess. having them really wanting luke on their side for their beleifs instead of making them into bad guys to just be disobeyed as traitors simplifys so much, keeping things basically black and white but reversing it. that was probably my biggest problem with it, but also, great power comes at great cost. vader sacrificed so much of himself to have his force powers, palpatine did also. they were once normal men but their power corrupted them. likewise, luke and yoda and ben required a lot of meditation and a lot of work to get their powers, so giving vader and luke amazing omg !!! powers all of a sudden seems like a cop-out. even if the cost for luke to use healing would be to kill something else (in Carnivale, ben must kill birds or fish to heal broken bones or bring life to a dying man), there should have been a cost, i think. it would have been more credible. i think your luke is a bit too girly, especially with the uncle owen beat me as a child and that's why i'm submissive argument (i know yours isn't that extreme, but its in that direction) but i think you justify it enough.
i have the list only because i so loved the idea and some of the emotions you bring up, especially the wrongness with the incest, the darkside/lightside conflict.. and the sheer hotness of it. just some of the details got in the way.
now i want to do a similar themed piece.. hmm.
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January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
One of the most wickedly beautiful things I've ever read! This is pure poetry, and so hot! Please, please, please, for the love of the Force, you must keep going with this!
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January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Gahhh! You've made me break mom's rule! She does not like this site... Oh well, this story is so good it's worth the grounding I'll get if she finds out. I like the story, and think that its stupid that it got taken off of ff.net. N