rate_review Reviews

I loved that story it was very good.

I really enjoyed your fic. Your writing is very descriptive and I love how you characterized Vader. He is still very much a man underneath all that armour. I have some constructive feedback to offer. When Vader shows his true self to Jessie the first time, he removes a trachea tube. It would be impossible for him to speak with a tube down his throat. Also, the fact that he gags while pulling it out of his mouth takes away from an otherwise sexy scene.

A very original fiction. Reading your description of Vader was very nice and quite a turn on for me since I love cyborgs!!