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for Two of a Kind

by allia

schedule August 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oooooh.

Nice twist. But a little too domestic for Jack. I don't think she'd do something like that... getting married? Nah. Maybe having a boyfriend like that but not married.

I'm not entirely sure that you should keep the baby around in the story. It doesn't tie in. What is Riddick going to play Daddy? It doesn't fit.

I like your story but it's too domestic in the child area. Other than that a good play out of the characters.
schedule April 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like reading these chapters and I love the last comment Jack made to Riddick.
person Silentviolin
schedule November 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hehe....more? nya?
person emma-bug
schedule June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
love it love it write more pleaseeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!

with love emma-bug
person Rose
schedule January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is really good. Please update soon. Later...
person moonlove
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*kneeling on floor, with folded hands* MORE PLEASE; I can not wait any longer!!!
person ASH
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
schedule December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more more more please
person atrixa
schedule December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
really really need more!
person hope
schedule December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm hooked please finish it! what happens between Jack and Riddick now that she's knocked up?