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great story write more i commannd you;....cougths slihgtly...anyway your doing great and i cant wait to see the next chapter.=)

It's a very interesting story, it's pretty good so far. The more you read and write, the better you'll become at writing. The events are lined up great and the fact that you added a flashback, that fit really well into the sorry line was excellent. Dialogue was good, the characters are developing pretty nicely. One thing you might already be planning, but give a little more back ground on Raj’ha and what's between him and Drav’en. A very good web site is: http://members.iinet.net.au/~jaherne/thehunted/yautja/index.php they got some Yautja language and names of the weapons and stuff, which is always usefully because you don't want to repeats words in the same sentence and stuff.
About my fanfic. AVP: Ooman Warrior I know I pretty much outline the movie and I'll be doing that for a couple of chapters, not only the re-set the mood, cause you can never be sure when the last time that watched AVP and also to cataolog inner thoughts and actions of specific characters.
So anyway, you fanfics not bad, I wouldn't mind reading more. From what I've read you're doing very well so far and I incourage you to continue on with your story.

this story is great please update soon.

that was a really sweet fic, i'm putting it on my favorites list. :D

Elowe ^_^ love the start and I know that it will be a great fic. Kudos on the story.

not bad.liked your story can't wait for more.hope u write more real soon