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March 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I LOVED Right hand :) It's just...so good, that words just aren't enough to describe it :D
Chapter ten was the perfect ending. You made me love Riddick. The possessiveness and gentleness were in perfect balance; The way Riddick took care of Vaako, and couldn't let anyone else touch him while he was wounded. And their relationship was nice too; the way Riddick protected Vaako and still teased him :)
I like that Vaako sisn't remember much of his dream-time with Yur. It would have been too cruel if he did remember. And then there would have been the trauma YOU would have had to deal with... It would have been a nice sequel, but I'm glad you ended it the way you did. Now the main focus is on the pairing and not on the incidence.
The ending was, simply put, perfect. The insecure and soft question of "mine?" was heartbreaking =) And the nicknames... xD I laugh ^-^
You are a great writer. There are so many elements in just this one story I love to death, so I can't possibly imagine what else you might come up with in other stories. It's just...
You moved me. And entertained me. And hardly anything moves me anymore the way you did.
So I thank you for gracing us all with your wonderful writing. And I hope you never stop writing and submitting ^-^
Holding "Right hand" forever close to her heart and moving on to read your other stories,
Fairietayle
Chapter ten was the perfect ending. You made me love Riddick. The possessiveness and gentleness were in perfect balance; The way Riddick took care of Vaako, and couldn't let anyone else touch him while he was wounded. And their relationship was nice too; the way Riddick protected Vaako and still teased him :)
I like that Vaako sisn't remember much of his dream-time with Yur. It would have been too cruel if he did remember. And then there would have been the trauma YOU would have had to deal with... It would have been a nice sequel, but I'm glad you ended it the way you did. Now the main focus is on the pairing and not on the incidence.
The ending was, simply put, perfect. The insecure and soft question of "mine?" was heartbreaking =) And the nicknames... xD I laugh ^-^
You are a great writer. There are so many elements in just this one story I love to death, so I can't possibly imagine what else you might come up with in other stories. It's just...
You moved me. And entertained me. And hardly anything moves me anymore the way you did.
So I thank you for gracing us all with your wonderful writing. And I hope you never stop writing and submitting ^-^
Holding "Right hand" forever close to her heart and moving on to read your other stories,
Fairietayle
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February 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, chapter eight sure is action filled :D
Finally we are reaching the center/highlight of the story!
The grey snow-dust - Eww.. Wouldn't want to be there breathing the remains of thousands of people into my lungs...
hmm, what else could I say...
Riddick was sweet ^-^ He's almost turning soft ;) But only almost.
Your flow is still incredible, no hitches what-so-ever. And it still doesn't seem rushed.
I applaud you.
Wondering if she should read the next chapter tonight,
Fairietayle
Finally we are reaching the center/highlight of the story!
The grey snow-dust - Eww.. Wouldn't want to be there breathing the remains of thousands of people into my lungs...
hmm, what else could I say...
Riddick was sweet ^-^ He's almost turning soft ;) But only almost.
Your flow is still incredible, no hitches what-so-ever. And it still doesn't seem rushed.
I applaud you.
Wondering if she should read the next chapter tonight,
Fairietayle
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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6 - *melts to a puddle of goo*
Well, that chappie was HOTT...
Yay, You brought the hellhounds back! The Rage POV was fun ;)
I loved how sweet Riddick was, ("Can't promote you to something that doesn't exist") and how gentle he was - and the fact that he want's to have something sweet in his harsh life :D
Umm.. I'm still kinda puddle-ish. I'm afraid "The smut was awsomely written" is about the only coherent thing I can say ^-^
Trying to pull herself together,
Fairietayle
Well, that chappie was HOTT...
Yay, You brought the hellhounds back! The Rage POV was fun ;)
I loved how sweet Riddick was, ("Can't promote you to something that doesn't exist") and how gentle he was - and the fact that he want's to have something sweet in his harsh life :D
Umm.. I'm still kinda puddle-ish. I'm afraid "The smut was awsomely written" is about the only coherent thing I can say ^-^
Trying to pull herself together,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi ^-^
I have to admit, I have already read "Right Hand" last night. After I read it, I had to register and leave you a comment ;D
First I thought that I would just leave you a message where I said everything I loved about the story, but then I decided that I would propably forget to mention something important and decided to rewiev each chapter separately - arent you lucky? ;D
I'll just take my time reading it this time, and savor it, so my comments will come when they come xD
So, On this first chapter I immediately noticed the flow of things. You write smoothly, for example when Wulia and Culys were speaking and Culys's thought wandered, you brought him back to Wulia's screeching gently, like when that happens in real life; you start to think something and then you notice you've missed something the other one has said and continued from there - you didn't start explaining what happened in the mean time.
That also explains the relationship the Vaakos have - You kept the characters in character and made them real. And I loved the conversation between them - it was exactly like I imagined it would be :)
I also liked Culys's feelings, the terror in the beginning, the thought that he wouldn't be forgiven his sins - because that made him human. And then the purifying chamber visits. How that made him so numb to Wulia that he saw right through her and had the spine to stick up to himself - even though in the end Wulia got her way, as always ;)
Then there's Vaakos no desire to be leader, and his simple and unwawering thoughts on how a leader should be.
...You just built the characters so beautifully from the start :D
And the Hellhounds :D :D
I was sad that they didn't show them much in the movie and I missed them, and I just knew I would see them in your story from the one sentence you wrote - and it made me insanely happy ^-^
I have no idea if you really understood anything from my babbling, but I'll try to be more coherent in the future ;D
With happy warm fuzzy feelings,
Fairietayle
I have to admit, I have already read "Right Hand" last night. After I read it, I had to register and leave you a comment ;D
First I thought that I would just leave you a message where I said everything I loved about the story, but then I decided that I would propably forget to mention something important and decided to rewiev each chapter separately - arent you lucky? ;D
I'll just take my time reading it this time, and savor it, so my comments will come when they come xD
So, On this first chapter I immediately noticed the flow of things. You write smoothly, for example when Wulia and Culys were speaking and Culys's thought wandered, you brought him back to Wulia's screeching gently, like when that happens in real life; you start to think something and then you notice you've missed something the other one has said and continued from there - you didn't start explaining what happened in the mean time.
That also explains the relationship the Vaakos have - You kept the characters in character and made them real. And I loved the conversation between them - it was exactly like I imagined it would be :)
I also liked Culys's feelings, the terror in the beginning, the thought that he wouldn't be forgiven his sins - because that made him human. And then the purifying chamber visits. How that made him so numb to Wulia that he saw right through her and had the spine to stick up to himself - even though in the end Wulia got her way, as always ;)
Then there's Vaakos no desire to be leader, and his simple and unwawering thoughts on how a leader should be.
...You just built the characters so beautifully from the start :D
And the Hellhounds :D :D
I was sad that they didn't show them much in the movie and I missed them, and I just knew I would see them in your story from the one sentence you wrote - and it made me insanely happy ^-^
I have no idea if you really understood anything from my babbling, but I'll try to be more coherent in the future ;D
With happy warm fuzzy feelings,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Once again, I love the flow :)
You showed Wulia's cunningness and her true colours neatly and believably and then put her neatly in her place and out of the way ^-^
I loved what you did to her, because there ARE worse things than dying and that is Wulia's weak spot ;D
And the way Riddick named the new first of commanders and the leader advisor... brilliant! ;)
I'm also glad you haven't forgotten the visits in the purifying chamber and show that in the ways it affects Cylus (did I spell it correctly this time? it's hard to remember where the y goes x) )
The Hellhound scene. I LOVE and ADORE it :D (I want a throne room full of Hellhounds too!! >_<)
You just make the characters so real and so 3D I almost believe I can touch them...:D
Racing eagerly to the next chapter,
Fairietayle
You showed Wulia's cunningness and her true colours neatly and believably and then put her neatly in her place and out of the way ^-^
I loved what you did to her, because there ARE worse things than dying and that is Wulia's weak spot ;D
And the way Riddick named the new first of commanders and the leader advisor... brilliant! ;)
I'm also glad you haven't forgotten the visits in the purifying chamber and show that in the ways it affects Cylus (did I spell it correctly this time? it's hard to remember where the y goes x) )
The Hellhound scene. I LOVE and ADORE it :D (I want a throne room full of Hellhounds too!! >_<)
You just make the characters so real and so 3D I almost believe I can touch them...:D
Racing eagerly to the next chapter,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3 - I still adore the hellhound :) I just would like to put a name to the face, so to speak ;)
It's amusing how easily Riddick is pulling Vaako on a leash. Riddick is just that kind of a guy, he takes what he wants and doesn't ask questions, and if others don't like it then tough luck. Vaakos non-existant resistant I'm blaming on the purifying chamber ^-^
Unable to keep herself in check and moving on,
Fairietayle
It's amusing how easily Riddick is pulling Vaako on a leash. Riddick is just that kind of a guy, he takes what he wants and doesn't ask questions, and if others don't like it then tough luck. Vaakos non-existant resistant I'm blaming on the purifying chamber ^-^
Unable to keep herself in check and moving on,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4.
The fight-scene was well built up. It started out small with line soldiers challenging their higher ups, and then after that was Vaakos fight.
The personal watch dog -bit was amusing, but I have a feeling he will pose a problem later on :)
AH-HAH! And the title of the story is revealed! Nicely done ^-^
Riddick always gets what he wants. And poor Vaako. Everything will be alright in the end, I'm sure the authoress will make sure of it ;)
Still unable to quit reading,
Fairietayle
The fight-scene was well built up. It started out small with line soldiers challenging their higher ups, and then after that was Vaakos fight.
The personal watch dog -bit was amusing, but I have a feeling he will pose a problem later on :)
AH-HAH! And the title of the story is revealed! Nicely done ^-^
Riddick always gets what he wants. And poor Vaako. Everything will be alright in the end, I'm sure the authoress will make sure of it ;)
Still unable to quit reading,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5; the plot behind Vaako's past and abilities thickens :D
I have to confess, I never would have thought Vaako and Riddick could work together. Somehow you just make it work and get even me exited about this pairing :D
That is a high praise to you, since Vaako wasn't one of my favourite characters when I watched the movie for the first times ;D
The honor guard Yur will be a problem, you can see that miles away. And Riddick is possessive, if not jealous yet (..I guess he has no reason to be, silly me xD). The whispering in Vaakos ear is a nice touch, so is Vaako's blushes :) They are cute little things that are important and remembered with fondness :D
...Still in love with the Hellhounds x) And the name Protega is gorgeous. I thought it would have origins in latin, but i still got the gist of the name. And I'm sure she will protect Vaako to the best of her abilities ^-^
Rage is also an appropriate name for the alpha. And I love how you are giving the Hellhounds their own personalities :D It makes them more "human" too, and not just nameless and faceless pets. You make them companions :D
I also like the way Riddick speaks, how he leaves the "I" out in the beginning of his sentences. It shows his origins :D
Swearing she had something else to say, but unable to remember what it was,
Fairietayle
I have to confess, I never would have thought Vaako and Riddick could work together. Somehow you just make it work and get even me exited about this pairing :D
That is a high praise to you, since Vaako wasn't one of my favourite characters when I watched the movie for the first times ;D
The honor guard Yur will be a problem, you can see that miles away. And Riddick is possessive, if not jealous yet (..I guess he has no reason to be, silly me xD). The whispering in Vaakos ear is a nice touch, so is Vaako's blushes :) They are cute little things that are important and remembered with fondness :D
...Still in love with the Hellhounds x) And the name Protega is gorgeous. I thought it would have origins in latin, but i still got the gist of the name. And I'm sure she will protect Vaako to the best of her abilities ^-^
Rage is also an appropriate name for the alpha. And I love how you are giving the Hellhounds their own personalities :D It makes them more "human" too, and not just nameless and faceless pets. You make them companions :D
I also like the way Riddick speaks, how he leaves the "I" out in the beginning of his sentences. It shows his origins :D
Swearing she had something else to say, but unable to remember what it was,
Fairietayle
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6 - The mystery of the planet of grey snow and big revalation of Vaako's past.
I love how the relationship between Vaako and Riddick develops. How Riddick wants Vaako too to feel, and feel good, when they finally have sex. How gentle Riddick is with Vaako :) And still teases him mercilessly and gets Vaako to blush xD
I like that you're givin Toaran his personality gradually. And how Yur is sliding into obsession so easily and slowly.
I also like the pace the story is moving. Nothing is rushed but still moving with it's own weight so that it doesn't feel too slow. Vaako realizes his feelings slowly even though not many days has passed. Your flow is really good ;)
The planet is a mystery, and that was your intention ;D It's a nice add up on the building relationship and not a distraction at all.
Vaako's past and origins...are interesting. The empathy is nice, you're making Vaako special instead of making him some allmighty-thingie or a furyan mate. It's a nice change :D Even though he is an almost created companion/mate, the empathy is still nice.
And you explained the quasi-dead well, as well as Vaako's reluctance in telling what he remembers.
Finally willing to let the story rest for the night,
Fairietayle
I love how the relationship between Vaako and Riddick develops. How Riddick wants Vaako too to feel, and feel good, when they finally have sex. How gentle Riddick is with Vaako :) And still teases him mercilessly and gets Vaako to blush xD
I like that you're givin Toaran his personality gradually. And how Yur is sliding into obsession so easily and slowly.
I also like the pace the story is moving. Nothing is rushed but still moving with it's own weight so that it doesn't feel too slow. Vaako realizes his feelings slowly even though not many days has passed. Your flow is really good ;)
The planet is a mystery, and that was your intention ;D It's a nice add up on the building relationship and not a distraction at all.
Vaako's past and origins...are interesting. The empathy is nice, you're making Vaako special instead of making him some allmighty-thingie or a furyan mate. It's a nice change :D Even though he is an almost created companion/mate, the empathy is still nice.
And you explained the quasi-dead well, as well as Vaako's reluctance in telling what he remembers.
Finally willing to let the story rest for the night,
Fairietayle
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story was wonderful; at turns touching, steamy hot, and exciting. Love the drama with Wulia, Garen is a hoot, and the Hellhounds were delightfully fun. Would love to see more in this AU, Riddick is going to be such a force for change in a positive way. Still, positive or not, change inevitably leads to chaos. *grins* Plus the whole Riddick/Vaako ship is super hot!