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June 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
that was so cool!!! I knew it!! I knew they were going to be a couple. That's so awesome. Post soon.
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June 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Immpressive! Certain parts were a tad choppy, yes...but mostly I love the way you described it. You made the dialogue and emotions all believable in a detailed, evocative manner that made everything easy to picture and pleasureable to read. I like the fact that you took some time to go through a conversation and work out some feelings...not just slammed 'em into the sheets and let nature do its work.
My favorite lines though...were at the end, where they quoted the movie: “This was a one time thang.” He said in his southern accent. He rolled over to face Heath, their noses only inches apart. “Cause I ain’t no queer.” I grinned at that...and also got that nice little fluttery sensation in my stomach saying...how cute! And romantic...and quite creative too. It made it easier to picture it all happening; I could totally see actors quoting the script. xD
Anyway, as a whole, reading it was a lovely experience and I'm glad you took the time to write and post. ^^
-Moonstar
My favorite lines though...were at the end, where they quoted the movie: “This was a one time thang.” He said in his southern accent. He rolled over to face Heath, their noses only inches apart. “Cause I ain’t no queer.” I grinned at that...and also got that nice little fluttery sensation in my stomach saying...how cute! And romantic...and quite creative too. It made it easier to picture it all happening; I could totally see actors quoting the script. xD
Anyway, as a whole, reading it was a lovely experience and I'm glad you took the time to write and post. ^^
-Moonstar
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great
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April 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Absolutley love it!!!I realllly hope that wasn't a one-shot!Wish you would continue it
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February 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hello! i really liked your story! I just had one little comment to make. When Heath says that Jake always does the goofy roles, or whatever, its not true. He was awesome in the movie Donnie Darko. His character was amazing. I love that movie so much. ! I just wanted him to get some credit for his acting in that movie! if you havent seen it, you should rent it. its an awesome movie! loved your story!
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February 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi this is such a good story please let me no when u update and dont tell me thats the end of it all let me no pleases at thegod86@msn.com plz plz plz dont stop lovein it xxxxxxxxx
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February 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my..! Even thou the characters weren't the same, I really enjoyed it! Heath could have been a little more rough and Jake a little more pushy and teasing, but it was really great!! You're thinking of makin a Brokeback Moutain...2?2??^-~would be awsome..!!! I give you.... 5 stars!!!!^o^
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Although your sex scene was a bit rushed, the whole story was very nice. I hope you decide to go on with it. ;)
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow!!!!!...Now I really can't wait to go see the film again, this was just hot! I would love to see more of this storyline, please keep going...^__^
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was eally hot.
I'm usually not that into RPG but in the BBM community it seems impossible not be be swept away with the chemistry between Heath and Jake*g*
Sequel?
I'm usually not that into RPG but in the BBM community it seems impossible not be be swept away with the chemistry between Heath and Jake*g*
Sequel?