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Ashleigh, when you have the courtesy to leave your email with your review, I'll leave your review up - even in all it's negative glory. Until then, I choose to remove it, specifically because of the aspersions cast on how Qui-Gon and Obi Wan are portrayed in the story, Your comment that I turned them into 'sex fiends' makes me doubt you did more than skim the fic at best. It's been a long time since I read through TEJTM but the "worst" thing I can recall Obi Wan doing was flirting with Padme on a single occasion in a deliberate attempt to get his Padawan to show his hand. Where you get that I turned both the Jedi Masters into 'sex fiends' is beyond me. You must really get your knickers in a twist at this ADULT site when you read/skim fics where Qui-Gon and Obi Wan, and sometimes Anakin are involved in a sexual relationship. Yes, I can certainly see where my having Obi Wan kiss Padme's hand and smile up at her would make him a sex fiend. As for Qui-Gon, without going in and pointedly looking for his name, I have absolutely no idea what he did to justify your label. As for the rest of your review, you are certainly entitled to your opinion on what you like and dislike - to each their own, but as you yourself noted with displeasure, the other reviewers disagree with you and I think I'll go with the majority on this one.

Well, dear Ashleigh, I'll end here. And while you may never see this response I leave it anyway because I tire of people who come to Adult fan fic sites, leave shocked reviews and then hide behind anonymity.

That was extraordinary! You captured the character of Padma and Anakin perfectly. A wonderful doomed romance. Classic, badboy Anakin was smokin' hot as well. Wish you had been involved with the script for the movies!!! You made a much clearer connection between the characters' internal life and their actions than I saw on screen. Bravo.

You know what, the other day a friend of mine and I started our Star Wars marathon because I had just bought all of the newer three. When we were watching The Phantom Menace we both noticed something was missing. The line where Anakin says he is going to marry padme was missing. I don't know why that is, it wasn't in the cut scenes. Did they only put it in the special edition? I remember the line being in the theater so why would they put it only in the special edition version. Or do you think I just have a warped version?

Wow..*sighs*...I need a minute to catch my breath....This is my second time reading the TEJTM and its just as good as it was the first time I read it. Aff.net has a surprising and disappointing low collection of Anakin/Padme fics. It is sooo nice to finally read well written erotica between these two. I love the way you write Anakin (his true nature in my book) and I can't wait for the next chapter in your new fic, 'Beatifully Shatter'.
keep writing the good stuff! ^_^

Missy

Your fanfictions are my favorites in this website.
your characters are so closed to the original saga's characters, that's awesome!

Just finished it, and it is awesome! I like it even more than "Succumb". And Anakin manages to break my heart again! What I like about this one versus "Succumb" is you get to see all of Anakin's emotions & his battle with the dark side, threatening to take him over. And in this one, it actually seems more like Padme is in love with him, not just the result of his Jedi mind tricks & manipulations and her gradual resignation. And the sex was HOT! Holy Sith! It was like, every chapter, they were going at it, like new lovers would and I was glad to see that. In "Succumb", I thought, how is it that Padme wants him yet never wants to have sex with him? Excellent job, I think she should be a published author, making tons of money!

Oh my GOD! I've only read the first four chapters, but this is HOT! So far I like this one a little better than Succumb because this is Anakin's POV, so you can see him wrestling with his emotions and the dark side, not just as some jerk who's hot & bothered & will have her no matter what! I wish this was a book so I wouldn't have to be tied to my computer to finish reading it! Excellent!

i love this fic, you're a great writer

Hello there! I've read almost all of your SW fanfictions and I am astonished by the superior quality of your work. Your stories are intense, sensual, full of angst and drama. I love your view of Padmé and Anakin's relationship, harsh, desperate, sometimes cruel, at the edge of the sanity. It is a magnificent work, unfortunately my ridiculous knowledge of the English language (I'm Brazilian and my first language is Portuguese) makes it hard for me to really find the words to show my admiration for your stories. Hoping that you can answer to this request, I would like to ask you something if you write more about A/P in the future; you have shown Anakin teaching Padmé almost all forms of making love and I would love to see him exploring one you left out in your preview stories and which I am too shy to say it here for all to see lol But I can say that it is more common to find this form of sex in a male/male relationship. Thank you for writing such wonderful stories and I hope that you come up with more wonderful plots exploring Anakin's torturous personality.

I first started reading this towards the end of last year- co-incidently I lost interest in the entire fandom for a few months, but now I'm back- and I was delighted to find it completed when I remembered to check on it. This is undeniably a very well written and powerfully conveyed story. I honestly believe your writing improved through the progression of the story- the language you chose seemed to convey more multilayered meanings, and the originality of your style grew. The writing is very effective- though not necessarily satisfying. It's so hard to like your depiction of Anakin! It was very clever, really, how you manipulated the progression of his character- one would normally expect for selfish, manipulative character to be redeemed by end of story, thus becoming the hero. You however, make Anakin the anti-hero very convincingly. Throughout the whole story I was frustrated because I felt like I was looking for an excuse to actually like him- he was selfish, controlling, dominant to a fault, arrogant, disrespectful etc etc- For a while I was quite put out, having found myself involved in a multi-thousand word story whose main character I couldn't bring myself to empathise with. However- then I realised what you had so cleverly done with your prologue and the occassional hint in the main body text- the whole story is told in retrospect from Anakin's perspective once he is well and truly sliding- ofcourse the reader is going to find it difficult to like him. So, by the time I had come to this conclusion I found it quite refreshing that you had written an Anakin that is not only unashamedly unlikeable, but also a story that doesn't try to justify its villain (because in some ways that's how I came to see Anakin). This whole story is FAR more original than first impressions imply. I've read nothing that takes these ideas and runs with them like you have.
I have to wonder at the seeming ease you had in completely subverting Padme's character... As much as I admire your concepts, I know I could never write a story with those principles because I just wouldn't have the patience to continually grind the female main character into the ground. In most stories I find it easy to relate to Padme's plight, but this was a completely foreign concept to me. So submissive! The raging feminist in me was shaking its cage for the entire duration of the story. In fact, ideologically, this is probably the biggest sticking point I had with this story: She is willing to be reduced to something less than her own self worth for passion, lust and love. So much for self determination and self respect! I kept waiting for her to take a proactive stance, but she continually allowed herself to be manipulated by him and seemed to be defined by reactions, as opposed to actions.
And here's the part that should interest you the most: Despite the fact that normally, I would lose interest in any story that doesn't keep the feminist in me happy, here I am 8 hours later reviewing your story after having read the whole thing cover to cover, so to speak, in one sitting. The best answer I have to the situation is that the sheer intensity of your writing kept my interest. So, keep in mind that my reading of this story is somewhat closer to the feminist discourse than the norm, and allow me to congratulate you on the literary contortions you've performed to write a wonderful story with a compelling, if diabollical, villain in the central role.