rate_review Reviews

I liked this story, but i kind of think you took Pinhead out of character a little. Like you made him a little to nice, but then again i do that from time to time in one of my stories. I really try not to though, but all in all it was a really great story and a very good read.

Well I really wanted to enjoy this story. There is just not enough Pinhead sex out there. Unfortunately it just doesn't suit my taste in fanfiction. I find I can't stand crossovers unless I don't know anything about the series that's being crossed. I am, however, familiar with Shinzon from Star Trek: Nemesis so it kind of bothers me to see him in a Hellraiser fic. But that's just my personal preference and really has nothing to do with how good or bad a fic is.

Anyway, I did read a few chapters of this story so I feel I owe you some feedback. There were some things I really liked. The part where Tori is with Elliot Spencer just before he becomes Pinhead was very well done. I love how she's just starting to feel intense passion for him when he is suddenly and horribly taken away from her. It was very Hellraiser-esque and I applaud you for it. In general I found the plot of this story very good. Fighting over who will get the princess of Hell. Tori's struggle between doing what's right for her (marrying Pinhead) and what might be best for hell (marrying Shinzon). Lots of tension building up makes the story exciting. Also, the sex scenes are long and detailed, always a plus =).

There were two things, besides the crossover, that really prevented me from getting into this story. First, there were too many spelling and grammar errors. I'm not expecting perfection or anything but when I see something like the word 'wonder' instead of 'wander' and other common typos it just pulls me out of the story. All you really need is someone to do a short proof reading before you post. The second thing that bothers me is that you sometimes use words or phrases to describe things that I find very unattractive. I distinctly remember reading a really hot sex scene between Pinhead and Tori and the coming across the phrase 'it felt as though there was a hack saw being forced into her vagina'. Ouch! That really ruined the moment for me.

I don't want to discourage you from writing. There seem to be several people eagerly awaiting the next chapter and I wouldn't want to spoil it for them. Obviously I'm in the minority in my opinion of this fic. I just thought I'd point out my likes and dislikes and you can decide whether you care or not. Also, villains just don't get enough love!

Oops! I forgot to log in. That Anon review is from me.

methinketh he didn't know what he was getting into...
hehehehehe...

you know, there have got to be more hellraiser fans then just us out there, so where the heck are they?
huh, anyway cute.

i can't see that castration thing happening any time soon.
something does happen next, right? right?
P.S. are you going to work on your other story?

Does this mean the story's allmost over?
where did the horses come from?
...and out of curiosity, why did you pick the name Cindy?
ah well, keep it comming!

Okay, so Shinzon is dead.
From here on out are things going to get easier? (spelling, bah.) and are you going to update your other story?
let me know!

Close, ScroTum, not ScroDum. so the change from demon to cenobite didn't kill it? i know that would really suck, but with the changing fluids all of a sudden there's no being sure.
Interesting, so who is now the bloodline of hell? or is there no longer one?
things could get messy from here...

oh he does, he does. we've seen him look puzzled in hellraiser 4. but an eyebrow... gods, i can't picture it, can you?
on to the next chapter!

P.S. you never responded and told me which your favorite hellraiser movies are. :(

Well, this could complicate things.
update!