rate_review Reviews

Firstly, I want to tell you how much I enjoyed reading this story and looked forward to your updates. you are a very good writer and the story flows at a good pace. The characters are beleiveable and make you care about them. I will be desperately awaiting book 2.

However, I do have one criticism of your writing style. you have a tendency to change tense, sometimes within the same sentence. It is particularly noticeable in the big fight in chapter 19. You go from "is" to "was" and back again. An example is "The strike is blocked as Al’brk’vix used the ornate weapon" - it should be either "was blocked" or "uses the"

changing tense can work if done correctly, for example writing the entire fight (or the most exciting parts of it) in the present tense can heighten the tension, but you do need to be more consistent.

I hope you don't mind me saying this. your work is good, very good in fact and just a little more care would make it truly outstanding.

Please keep writing

Kehlan

As Shalimar said, it's simply not fair!

Have to wait months to find out what happens? Phooey!

I'm glad though that Cass will perhaps have some chance at having a life. I suppose things really can't go too much further downhill in terms of losing anything, since she has nothing left really, except maybe Vek. :)

Can't wait for the next book.

You apparently had an error when posting this chapter. Its the same as chapter 8.

Okay, so not fair! This is like a season ender and now we have to wait months to find out what happens next. :-( I'm glad it seems as if Cass at least has a fighting chance to live. Vek's devotion to her promises lots of future problems, starting with how Cass is going to feel about it. One of the things I really like about this fic is that the two of them are drawn to each other by their mutual background as law enforcement officers. This is a very different approach, and it works well to make their relationship progress in a way that seems plausible. I'm looking forward to the sequel.

YAY!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO ME!!! THANK YOU SOOSOOSOO MUCH PRAIRIEFIRE. Ok, now that I am over my joy. I must say that I loved it. And I totally cannot wait until you start to post the next installment. I'm so excited. I want to know what the 'unusual' mission is. OO, so excited. =D

Wow, simply an amazing story overall, Prairie. Watching Cass and Vek work together was just incredible. There were times I seriously cried during the story, but mostly it was just brilliant. Cannot wait until you continue it in the next story. ^_^ And Vek and Cass kick such serious ass.

Okay... all caught up now.
Brutal, girl, brutal... But a good finish. a good ass-kicking on both sides. Cass, the poor woman, still had enough guts to get up and whoop ass after all the shit she's been through? Good on her!

I hope to see the latest, and last (?) chapter soon. REally, would like to see this fic extend beyond this... heh, i'm all for vigilante justice. :D Vek and Cass kung-fuing the general populace a'la the Boondock Saints. hehe

good beginning. Lots of interesting elements. Good character development. Pretty hot at the beginning. I could almost smell the humidity. Cocky bastard!

re: chapter 10: dear gods, I didn't even see this!
I suck, i know... I disappeared for a while... I want to keep writing my own fic but I got distracted. heh.

Okay, I"m gonna catch up, i haven't read predfic in almost... 6 months? geez...

Aw, only one chapter left? Thats too bad. Poor Cass just hasn't had any joy in her life, to lose everything and then to be violated, can't imagine she'd want to live even after all this.

Will be looking forward to the end, as well as any other stories you may choose to right, hopefully. :)