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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
^__^ As promised, here it appeared!
I'm glad I could be that driving foot in your ass. *Eye roll* Anyways, keeping posting and maybe I'll call you back one of these days. (...or at least type up that RW thing for you. La!)
Anyhow, I suppose I can't comment much on characterization, seeing as I'm still ignorant in the ways of Will and Han, but I will say your writing is delightfully wonderful and insane, as always. (I almost had the whim to call it 'delicious,' wouldn't that just be fitting?)
Continue your writing dear or else.
I know where you live.
~*Q*~
I'm glad I could be that driving foot in your ass. *Eye roll* Anyways, keeping posting and maybe I'll call you back one of these days. (...or at least type up that RW thing for you. La!)
Anyhow, I suppose I can't comment much on characterization, seeing as I'm still ignorant in the ways of Will and Han, but I will say your writing is delightfully wonderful and insane, as always. (I almost had the whim to call it 'delicious,' wouldn't that just be fitting?)
Continue your writing dear or else.
I know where you live.
~*Q*~
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very wonderful story so far! Poor Will. Hopefully hannibal will help him with his problems. Can't wait for more
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful!
I especially love the way you mix Will's memories and dreams. Your characterization is still as great as in the first chapter, the mixture of sanity and madness you let Will display very convincing.
I'm looking forward to more updates, since I can't wait to know how Hannibal will react to Will's letter and so on. You got me hooked, so keep up the good work.
darkangel985
I especially love the way you mix Will's memories and dreams. Your characterization is still as great as in the first chapter, the mixture of sanity and madness you let Will display very convincing.
I'm looking forward to more updates, since I can't wait to know how Hannibal will react to Will's letter and so on. You got me hooked, so keep up the good work.
darkangel985
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July 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You wrote the first chapter! Thank you so much for taking the time and writing your story down. There is not nearly enough out there in the Red Dragon Fandom.
Now, let me review the chapter. I really like the opening this chapter gives. I think that you did a great job on introducing us to the different players and you showed us as well how they interact. I like your Will. He is so angry with Crawford and with the Bureau. I believe all of us would be angry if others had used us for their purposes time and time again. I also liked the way you showed us Will's thoughts on the going ons. I am curious to learn what Hannibal thinks about all of this,
Concerning fast driving and Crawford, I have to admit that I am one of these people who usually drive app. 100 miles/hour (160 km/h where I am from). I know that you should not do that but I am a fast driver. Unfortunatly. Strangely enough the only accident I have been in so far happened when I was driving 3 miles/hour in a traffiv jam. *shakes head* That's me being shtoopid. Crawford as he is described in your story is actually very different from the Crawford we'll get to see in my second story 'All the King's Horses' But you'll see in my next chapter which ought to be up some time next week.
Thank you for you great work and please keep on getting up from your bed and sitting down on your chair to write the stories you come up with.
Take care,
Simarillion
Now, let me review the chapter. I really like the opening this chapter gives. I think that you did a great job on introducing us to the different players and you showed us as well how they interact. I like your Will. He is so angry with Crawford and with the Bureau. I believe all of us would be angry if others had used us for their purposes time and time again. I also liked the way you showed us Will's thoughts on the going ons. I am curious to learn what Hannibal thinks about all of this,
Concerning fast driving and Crawford, I have to admit that I am one of these people who usually drive app. 100 miles/hour (160 km/h where I am from). I know that you should not do that but I am a fast driver. Unfortunatly. Strangely enough the only accident I have been in so far happened when I was driving 3 miles/hour in a traffiv jam. *shakes head* That's me being shtoopid. Crawford as he is described in your story is actually very different from the Crawford we'll get to see in my second story 'All the King's Horses' But you'll see in my next chapter which ought to be up some time next week.
Thank you for you great work and please keep on getting up from your bed and sitting down on your chair to write the stories you come up with.
Take care,
Simarillion
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July 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy that you posted the first chapter. Now to some serious reviewing:
The characterizations are awesome. Especially your characterization of Crawford because you make him seem like a really inconsiderate bastard, who just uses agents when he needs them. Will's anger really adds to that picture. I also liked the whole part where Will thinks about insanity and his brushes with it. He's just got all these emotions pent up inside and they are just waiting to break free.
I'm absolutely looking forward to more of this. So I wish you lots of creativity and hope that I'll see more of your writing soon.
darkangel985
The characterizations are awesome. Especially your characterization of Crawford because you make him seem like a really inconsiderate bastard, who just uses agents when he needs them. Will's anger really adds to that picture. I also liked the whole part where Will thinks about insanity and his brushes with it. He's just got all these emotions pent up inside and they are just waiting to break free.
I'm absolutely looking forward to more of this. So I wish you lots of creativity and hope that I'll see more of your writing soon.
darkangel985