rate_review Reviews

Another well done chapter. I like the suspence! I can't wait to read who her betrothed might be? I like the way you write about Norringtons feelings towards her but kind of wish there was a little bit more from her.Well done anyways I will be looking forward to the next chapter.

I love/hate the suspence you put in each chapter...lol. No, really it's a good thing! I can't wait to see who her finace is(and I think I have an idea of who it might be...?) Also, I'm glad you're portraying Gillette like such a douche. I cannot stand him. Keep up the good work!

Loving the story as Norrington is my favourite PoTC character! Just one thing though, there's no chance that an English naval officer in the 18th century would call himself a jerk...probably 'fool' or something, as jerk isn't a term used in the UK. Hurry with updates though, it's very well written! :)

Oh that was clever! Very clever, indeed. I love the tension, love it all. Can't wait for more!

Really love to see a fellow Norrington fan. Like the characterization (please disregard my spelling) but your history is somewhat off. The story would be perfect if you just put in a little more historical detail, like finding what insults they would have used then, instead of prick or jerk. Other than that, great story, can't wait for more!

It's allways a pleasure to find a decent fic from other than the "main"characters.
I loved Norringtons stiff character even in the first movie. The language he uses and
especially the voice of Jack Davenport... not to mention his good looks... well a girl
falls for the stiffies occasionally. :) Keep up the good work!

I like the story. It intrugues me. I do hope you won't give up on it or anything. Though I do have some other comments, I can't think of them right now lol. I'll comment again later....

wow, sounds quite interesting so far. Keep it up. Not nearly enough stories about Norrington out there and this is a good one.

Just wanted to let you know that this is a really good story.I plan to come back and reading the rest. Please finish the story since its so good and I would hate for it to not have an ending. Also I just wanted thank you for writting one that made him straight. Its about time someone wrote one where he isn't gay. You are doing a great job on how he is as a navey man and how his emotions sometimes get out of control. I saw that in both the movies when I watched. He would sometimes drop the mask of just being a man on duty and following rules to someone who actualy had emotion going on inside of him. That he really cared about Elizabeth and it hurt to see her go with someone else. I also like the whole new character thing too that it doesn't have Will or Elizabeth in it or Jack. I like them but to just know something about the Commodore is really cool even if its from your point of view.

Thanks

First of all, I love this story. I think I already said that, but if I haven't, there you go.

Second, I hope you don't mind a little - hopefully - constructive criticism. There are a few grammatical errors, mostly ones I find typical of fanfiction. They don't necessarily take away from the story in anyway, but nevertheless. For example you wrote: “My pendant!” She exclaimed. The "She" should be lower case, unless her exclamation is something other than what is in the quotations. As I said, this doesn't really take away from the story, so if you decided to continue on in that fashion, so be it, it wouldn't bother me that much.

Next, I think there were a few too many clichés in that last part of chapter four. I enjoy them immensely (that's why I'm on this site after all) but, they still make cringe in that that-was-a-little-cheesy kind of way. I'm not entirely sure you can do anything about that, as romance novels tend to all follow this pattern, but maybe tone it down a tad. By clichés I mean mostly the metaphors and similes. Also, then you get things like this if you are not careful: "She stopped directly in front of him, stood on *tip toe* and wrapped her arms around his neck before *lowering* her lips to his." That seems like a rather awkward action.

Lastly (I promise) it seems like Norrington is succumbing a little too quickly, especially given how "straighten up and fly right" he is in the first movie. I don't disagree at all with your characterization of him on the whole, that's really just my opinion.

In conclusion, because I appear to need one, I love your story; I will definitely be back for more (assuming there is more to come - which I hope there is)!