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Wow. Nice. Although the ending bits after his misunderstanding was a bit saccharine. But that's okay.

You did right by Jareth's character for the most part and the scorchingly hot interlude in the tub and on the bed will be burned in my memory forever. Excellent writing and a highly recommended piece of fun.

4 Stars.

"You're just envious because mine is bigger..."

Without so much as turning to look at her he challenged, "Would you care to see for yourself just how wrong you are?" He looked over his shoulder, letting his predatory gaze settle on her as his feral smile taunted, "Perhaps you'd enjoy being proven wrong in this particular instance?"

-- Oh...NICE. Threatening and Alluring all in one pop.

"Because she grabbed my POTATO!!!!!!!!"

-- LMAO - absolutely priceless.

Excellent yarn, my dear, excellent.

I find it amusing that he's so bound and determined to make her hot and bothered, then drop her like a hot potato. (HA!) I can't wait to get to the point where he realizes it was never intentional. I mean, he says so, but he really doesn't get it. Not yet.

"Ok, so I'm lusting..." Curbing her drifting thoughts she assured herself, "But only a little."

-- *snort* Yeah. Right.

Ah Sarah, so determined to keep your distance...But I'm afraid you've already given yourself away...Resist if you must...but like the struggling fly caught in the web, you only bind yourself tighter."

-- *sounds of disgust* What a jackass. They could have something real and lasting between them if he'd let go of that, "but she hurted me!" childish attitude of his and be a real man.

For the first time ever, he felt slightly wicked for indulging in the desire to watch Sarah, when she was so unaware of his presence.

-- w00t! About damn time his conscience awoke.

LMAO! That's right, Sarah. Make out with the fruit and make him realize what an ass he is. Go, girl!

"Of course. With you I really ought to know better. Fine, what are the stakes?"

-- I think she'd better keep her mouth shut 'cause I don't think she really wants to know...

His blood pounded insistently, for he couldn't bear to wait a second longer.

Chapter 30: Possession

-- *ACK* You are absolutely evil, to cut things off RIGHT THERE. Hot buildup and then you cut us off...just like that. EVIL.


And now that they've come together as one, I'm terrified of what Jareth's going to do to her now. I just hope he isn't stupid enough to push her away forever.

*ACK* Damn it, Sarah. You know he's always listening, why didn't you just say what you meant the FIRST TIME?! Stupid, stupid girl.

Poor GK.

"No magic now asshole...just you and me. It's on, you son of a bitch."


w00t! You go, girl! Badass!Sarah. YEAH!

It has been years since I've read a Labyrinth fan fic and there were some lovely ones out there, but you have taken the Jareth/Sarah romance fic to a whole different level. This story was a pleasure to read, your writing style is extremely artful and the plot was fabulous! I loved it, loved it, loved it! It makes me want to go back and rent the old movie, which I haven't watched in years. You're wonderfully talented and I can tell you took your time to make this story just right. I think you should come back to this story and give it a short epilogue...you know...a few years later, etc.

Again LOVED IT! WOO HOO!

wowww icridile storie...you are an amazing author congratulation

You can't begin to fathom how very happy you made me with this story.

It is VERY nice to see someone who not only writes competently, but know some real literature, how to apply it, and how to keep someone's interest.

I admire you as a writer and hope to see many more great things coming from you, and I would have reviewed sooner but........ I was intent on reading this. Very quickly.

Anyway. Your plot was wonderful and original, your spelling and grammar were amazing (only three or so off words, but I'm an English nutter and all of these AP courses tend to get to you. You write in a way that can keep interest, is very well worded, and doesn't focus purely on sex. There was great romance, a steady consistency of characters (the new well created, the originals very well written), and the way you portrayed Jareth was positively superb. In my head I could literally see him saying words, and I haven't seen someone who could do that for a while.

In short (not that this is anything in the vicinity of short), I positively loved this story and encourage you to write more. You have a true talent and that should not be wasted.

Best wishes,
~V

PS: Email me is you get the chance. I've been writing a story the past few days and would like to share. :D

What an engaging tale, I'm loving it so far!!!