rate_review Reviews

That last paragraph was hysterical. I have to say I like the bad ass Sarah very much. Your story line is simply wonderful, it's so long yet it doesn't lose any momentum or plot twists. Great job.

I have to say, I've read this piece through several times, and I really admire the fact that it actually has a plot; that it's not just smut for smut's sake. Usually when people invent things about the Underground, it sounds very contrived and fake, but both your settings and your characters seem as though they could plausibly exist. Well done.
And, so that this turns into a constructive review, you might want to have someone else you know read this through to double-check for spelling/puncuation/grammar, etc. There's nothing seriously wrong, but there are a few little things that throw me off. Misplaced commas, the occasional run-on, that sort of thing.
E-mail me if you want to argue. :)

Jeez, I am an avid reader of this story. Sarah kicking Fae ass is like freaking awesome. I love the ending lines, perfect cliffhanger material. :D Keep going!

and sarah proceeds to beat him to a bloody pulp... i laughed and laughed >=D

well done ~ BRAVO!

i certainly hope poor tempest is safe and stomps the rest of them.

maybe sarah can start an underground women's movement. equality, self defence etc.

please excuse my disjointed musings, i've not been myself recently.

always a pleasure,
ginny

HELL YEAH!

Sarah is going to kill the son of a bitch! Go Sarah, whip that ass! Hahaha, I love this story. I only come on AFF to read this specific one. I love it sooo much and you're such a great writer ^_^ Thanks for giving me something so awesome to read. Your detail isn't too much or too little. Most stories that are posted these days are dry and poorly written. Thank you for being orignal and wonderful with your words. I can't wait to read more.

GO SARAH! Show the nigga who's the bitch in the house. Who said a female can't be the hero? Sarah's the shit.

Saludos
Evelyn

I am loving badass Sarah!

Fuck yes! Go Sarah! Kick his ass! I'm totally rooting for her. ~air horn sounds~ Wooo!!!

(Pumps her fist in the air) Score! Badass Sarah. I hope she can deal with whatever the Shadow Horde has planned. They probably know that she's coming and won't be caught off guard. I'm loving this story and I hope you come out with the next chapter soon ^.^

*crise* ZOMGS!!!!! You're so horrible! Is Tempest going to live!?!?! Please, PLEASE don't kill him! >.< That would too sad! The goblins will find them all and come to the rescue--right!? And then Nyx will die because he's evil and Sarah will take Jareth back to the castle and nurse him back to health. Oh, I can just see that! Him laying in bed, near death and Sarah sitting beside him nursing him back, taking care of him! ^_^ *laughs* Well, I'm sure that probably won't happen, but either way I'm sure whatever the outcome you write will be wonderful. I can't wait for the next chappie!

Amazing story. I find myself checking to see if there is anything new before anything else in the morning!!